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Apples for Brightly18

Jun 25, 2009 07:20

Title: Apples
Author: Thesiriusmoon
Recipient: Brightly18
Beta'd by: The wonderful minimoonylupin! Though I did go and tweak a bit after she got done with it, so any flagrant mistakes are mine!
Keyword: Bucket, Mop, Illustrated Book About Birds
Dialogue: "Look at What You've Done!"
Rating: PG13
Disclaimer: Still not mine. Sigh.
Word Count: 2210
Summay: Just ( Read more... )

june 2009, 2000+ words, rated pg-13

Comments 7

remuslives23 June 25 2009, 12:25:00 UTC

This was effing brilliant! Brilliant! I adore every single word of it and it's going directly into my memories. Lucky brighty!!

thesiriusmoon June 25 2009, 13:38:00 UTC

Thank you!!! :D I'm all warm and fuzzy now.

cherie_morte June 25 2009, 19:32:18 UTC

This was such a fantastic idea and so wonderfully executed! I actually have a bit of an apple kink myself (hello, that smell!) but this was brilliant even beyond that. The little breaks wth the mythology that fit so well and the atmosphere of the whole thing was so sensual and just hng over the entire story. Wonderful, I really enjoyed this!

thesiriusmoon June 25 2009, 20:49:19 UTC

Thank you! There really is something about apples... I always like to think that even Remus' kinks are literary :D

OMG!!! brighty18 June 26 2009, 22:53:11 UTC

That was just... FANTASTIC!!!

I loved the use of the Bible and Greek mythology. Apples are such a potent symbol and you used it amazingly well.

You also combined bits of angst, fluff, romance, and humor (this cracked me up (“You sure you’re okay?” James sounded worried, but Remus couldn’t look up. Because if he did then Sirius’ apple scented bits were going to be in very immediate danger.) into a lovely mix that read very, very well. Oh, and the bit about the Marauders' dententions was particularly amusing.

But, really, the best part was that peak into Remus' psyche. The apples, the thinking, the fear of not being human. It all seemed so real and so very, very poignant.

And your Sirius was very funny and very touching.

Lovely and totally going to be saved into my memories!

Re: OMG!!! thesiriusmoon June 27 2009, 12:46:43 UTC

Thank you!!! I'm so glad you liked it :D Ialways love delving into Remus' mind. There are so many different ways of portring him, but I like to think that the wold really does affect him 24/7. And the fact the he ends up losing everyone, his whole pack, has always struck me as unbearably sad.

the_seattlegirl November 11 2009, 11:20:19 UTC

I loved it! The way you captured Remus' wolfy feelings on his pack was just perfect.