Lies to Live by- first installment

[runningondreams]

"if a man were to become invisible he would steal left and right, he would enter every house, he would rape women and kill men and open up prisons. In fact he would become like a god among humankind" (from The Republic)

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Claude Raines’ invisible man had been a scientist who discovered invisibility, only to go insane and start

Comments

[c_quinn]

This is fantastic.

The definition of ‘test subject’ excluded no one and sometimes Claude wasn’t sure who had it worse- the people who were vivisected for their ‘power’ or the ones who never felt the knife that split their lives down the middle and didn’t notice the tweezers that tugged their psyche to bits

I thought that was especially powerful.

Great work. Will there be more soon?

[runningondreams]

Yes, I have the next two parts to this one finished and I'll be posting them later (probably tomorrow and Monday).

Glad you enjoyed it! I really liked that part too- I have to think that the company wouldn't limit its studies just to people with 'abilities.'^.^

[balikpulang]

Awesome fic! I've not found too many good Heroes ones, esp. fillers/backstories, and really enjoyed this first parter.

Love Isaac's "debut" here, your realistic - and perhaps foreboding take on both men's relationship to the company, Claude's ex-partner who got killed by a very X-Men-like "hero," the subtle, rising tension with Claude/HRG, with nice hints for Claude/Peter .... and you called him Jack!

Thanks a bunch. Keep it up!

[runningondreams]

You are quite welcome! Thanks for leaving such a detailed comment!

[superherogrlcat]

XD, awesome! Mind you, I knew that already ^^. And I like the change you made, at the end, with the fight scaene.

...I still think Cladue could beat the crap out of Bennet. -_-

[runningondreams]

well maybe he will... later ^.~

glad you like the change- I felt like it gave that bit a little more impact. Of course, I probably wouldn't have done it without your suggestion ^.^

[acaciaonnastik]

Oooooh... this is a very promising setup. Slash ignores the canon-het way too often, and I love Sandra way too much for that, so I'm glad to see her being properly respected. The psychological aspects are way cool, and the tension manages to be hot even with no actual sex. And it does seem more real, that two guys in isolation would fight before they'd fuck.

Bennet followed orders even when he didn’t hear them and there were nights when Claude lay awake staring at cracked hotel ceilings, almost physically sick because he could see the strings as they were pulled and still he jumped.

And isn't that just their dynamic in a nutshell?

Great job, and I look forward to seeing more!

[runningondreams]

Thanks, and I (obviously) agree on Sandra- both because she's so amazing and because Bennet is so completely in love with her. ^.~ She'll have a fairly big role in this series as it goes on. I don't think it'd be possible for Claude to be involved with Bennet and not get involved with his whole family.

Glad you liked the mind games! And cheers for non-sex hotness- I'm glad you think so, because that's definitely a goal. More coming soon.... ^.^

[acaciaonnastik]

^_^

...mind if I mention one thing about the formatting, though? I'm not sure what program you write this in, but for whatever reason, when it gets to LJ, the spaces between paragraphs are not doublespaced, like

this

but quadrupled, like

this. It looks a little weird.

[runningondreams]

yeah, that's been annoying me. It's microsoft word, and I'm not sure how to fix it.... guess I could just go through and delete them. xP

[lady1raven]

Fantastic. I like the Company manipulating them, and I love that Bennet's marriage interferes with Bennet/Claude, 'cause I love both Bennet/Claude and Bennet/Sandra.

I think this is my favorite line: "It was so much easier to be invisible in a city. He didn’t even have to be transparent."

[runningondreams]

Yay, another Bennet/Claude and Bennet/Sandra fan! ^.^ Thanks very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it.