My first time - be gentle

[rurouni82]

Well, I left a lot of obscure promises I feel like keeping, so here's what my creative writing class turned out. I got a bit of feedback, and my teacher feels that a part of the end is a bit cliche and that I should try to develop the last character a bit differently. So, this isn't the final draft...but I thought I'd get feedback here and

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[mj_automatic]

write more. :D