Fic: Out of Sight (1/2)

[ryeloza]

Title: Out of Sight (1/2)
Pairing: Ben/Leslie
Word Count: 4000
Rating: PG-13
Setting: Road Trip, right after Chris interrupts Ben and Leslie on the couch
Summary: AU version of Road Trip where Ben and Leslie decide to play Boggle with Chris.
A/n: A couple of weeks ago, sunnyday678 gave me a couple of prompts about Ben and Leslie during road trip.  I had

Comments

[shornt]

I SHOULD NOT HAVE READ THIS AT WORK omfg. Feet freak me out but you made feet CUTE. Omg. Highly anticipating the second part. Oh my god the tension. DAMN YOU.

[ryeloza]

Lol. Having seen how much feet can freak people out, if I managed to make feet cute to someone who dislikes feet, then I consider that a huge accomplishment. Thank you!

[ryeloza]

Yeah...Part of me cannot believe I've now written two fics about them flirting while playing games. Lol. Thank you! Hopefully I'll have the next part done soon.

[americnxidiot]

ahhh i want part 2 right now??

but seriously this is great. you write the tension stuff so, so well.

[ryeloza]

Thanks!

[tbhf]

Ok, I actually screamed with joy a little bit when I saw this! It was, like everything you write, amazing!! I absolutely adore Season 3 AUs like this, and I simply can't get enough of them. The tension was palpable and perfectly written. You just write these two so incredibly well...as always, I'm in awe of your skills :) I can't wait to read part 2!

[ryeloza]

Thank you so much! I love season 3 AUs too, although I'm still a bit surprised I'm actually writing one for Road Trip.

[popgurlie]

this is wonderful. SO much tension -- both sexual and the possibility of being caught by chris -- and i honestly felt my heart race as i kept reading faster because i needed to know what happened next. then i stopped short at this line and re-read it several times because it's just so perfect for them, the canon, the world you created and this very moment:

"All the flirting they’ve been doing for weeks is finally manifested in physical contact, and he is privy to how it translates."

so deceptively simple and again, so perfect with your description of how their actions and interactions have been up to this moment and how very much aware of each other they are. plus the added level of the restaurant admission and how neither have really gotten a chance to discuss it, how they feel past "no, it's not just you." so to see it play out on both sides -- how much the other person wants them, wants to be with them -- is thrilling and you write the whole scene with these delicate and teasing moments in such an exciting, breathtaking way.

[ryeloza]

Gah--it always means a lot to me to hear you liked something I've written, and I really appreciate the feedback. Thanks so much!