MOAR

[sablewinged]

- Funeral-

Standing at the rail, Mathilda looked back at the shell of her old friend floating not far off from them. The ship’s mast was cracking, audible even from this distance, and her hull was quickly taking on water. To look at the derelict ship, one would wonder how it survived the night.

But she had. She’d kept her crew safe until

Comments

[crimson_713]

YAY! Violence! Very well done. Funeral actually made me sad, that was awesome.

[sablewinged]

Haha glad you approve! More violence to come, once I break the rust off it. I haven't written that sort of thing in quite a while, and I forgot how hard it can be to make it believable and compelling.

[crimson_713]

I normally find that being descriptively vague about it helps a wee bit. Show the reader enough to make them squirm, but let their imagination do all the hard work.

I get that from reading a lot of Clive Barker.

[sablewinged]

heheh...I've got a couple stories on my DA page you should read. My friends told me they were in physical pain when reading them because of the descriptions. Of course, this was pain being inflicted on the focus character, and one was in first person, so naturally it's much more descriptive and in depth.

I'm trying to gear up to actually write a fight scene with her. I wish i could draw and animate stuff, though. GAH would the images I've got be an awesome picture or video.