The fight...

[sabrequeen]

Sooooo... here it is... my first big attempt at writing a fight/smut scene, but I have no idea which way to go...
I'm looking at either Jack making good on his 'threat' or Ianto taking over... which way should I go?

“Jack, I don’t care what you have to do, but I don’t want you to hold back against me. You’ve said yourself that the real world isn’t

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well written

[amber_gold]

Wow. That's not bad. I don't have a suggestion for which way to go, although it seems headed in the right direction -- but do you really think that Ianto could hold Jack against his will? (Of course, who says he really wants to get loose, for that matter.) Nicely done distraction by Ianto, btw.

Re: well written

[sabrequeen]

That's the thing... When your arms are pinned above your head, you don't have any lateral strength to push whatevers pinning you off. And you're probably right about Jack not really wanting to get loose... he's wierd like that...
Thanks for the feedback!

[blackbird_song]

You have a good start, but writing explicit (and correct) body origami is crucial in fight scenes, as well as graphic sex scenes. From your reply to another comment, it looks as though you have some personal training in or understanding of fight techniques, but there are certain areas where it isn't clear how the bodies are oriented

[sabrequeen]

Thank you! I onlly have a very basic knowledge of the fighting from growing up with 3 older siblings... But that's just the thing, I'm trying to figure out if Jack really wants to gain the upper hand again. as to where to knee was, it's a basic move that I learned works rather wel on people who are slightly bigger than you. You use your elbow to wind them, and when they double over, you slam your knee into thier thigh, knocking them onto thier stomach... then you can run away, or do what Ianto's doing... and Jack's on his front... I am putting all this in the story, but I'm really bad about rambling sometimes... thank you again for the feedback!