Darkness Shadowed

[sahara_twinnie]

So I haven't for sure decided if this is how I want the first chapter to be but I decided to post it, if any of you writing geniuses out there want to tear it apart, but don't hurt me, please

Comments

[elsie]

You found me! *shifty eyes*

[sahara_twinnie]

That I did, are you scared? you should be *evil grin*

[lynn_thomas]

I can't believe I missed this post!!!! I think I need to stop using the friends button on my LJ. I really like this opening, one to think about is the the repeating of how hugary she looks. You say it a couple of time and it's begins to lose effect because of the repeating. I love your voice for the variuos perople. Nice start..... where's the rest?

[sahara_twinnie]

hehe, thanks Lynn I just noticed that I repeated that alot, Well I have another chapter but I have a few tweaks I want to mess with first, that and school starting is taking all my creative juices, urg...