Tutu Sonnet

[sailor_titan]

I'm going to illuminate this, but I wanted to post it for any last minute critique.

It's a SONNET! For theternalmind, for guessing who what character wrote my sonnet awhile back.

Rue x Siegfried.

Comments

[ilikebigtoes]

post this to princesstutu !

[sailor_titan]

haha, let me finish it first!

[yukie1013]

Ooh, I like this ^^

[shirono]

some specs are a little off:

(2) A life with no duty or woe= /-/-//-/
(4) only seven syllables
(5) With renewed love and restored heart= ///--/-/
(7) and confirmed all my darkest fears= ///-/-/-
(11) nine syllables

Maybe my iamb is a messed up? But thats my read of it. Other wise, pretty damned good.

[sailor_titan]

I'll go back and check the iamb again. With some of them it might be ~*~wonky Elizabethan extra syllable adding~*~ that made it iambic pentameter.

But I don't think Shakespearean sonnets require a syllable count--or so wikipedia says, and that was always my understanding.

Oh wait, it says at the top it does have ten syllables in each line. Uh, fuck. Although damn, I wasn't even counting syllables, and they all had ten syllables except for two lines?! Just incidentally!? That's actually kind of... impressive, lol, in a weird arse way.

I might be lazy and just say "It's a sonnet... except without the syllable counts, because I am lazy!" :D

[shirono]

PENTAMETER

The pent being the five in the five pairs of syllables.

But your are actually in sets of 8. ^_^;;;
I was wondering, thinking, penta doesn't mean four. Maybe it's italian or something and she's going by eight.

As for the stresses, I think no one actually pays super close attention to those anymore. Except Willy, who did it perfectly every damned time.

[sailor_titan]

Yeah, I realized that later. "oh yeah, pentameter..."

I don't know, personally I've always felt the stresses are more important to the poem than the syllables... it's the rhythm that really makes sonnets for me, not the number of syllables.

ugggggh now I basically have to re-write the entire poem. T_T

[theeternalmind]

Aww... That's really sweet. ._./ Thank you for this!