Home (Challenge #76, Sonnet; Hakkai POV; PG-13)

[opalmatrix]

Title: Home
Author: opalmatrix
Warnings: mentions of blood and incest
Pairing(s): Hakkai/Kanan, Hakkai/Gojyo
Spoilers: Hakkai's backstory
Notes: written for saiyuki_time, Challenge #76, Sonnet;; time allowed: 90 minutes; time taken: errrrh, I totally lost track ... somewhere between 60 and 120 minutes, I guess. I'm not completely happy with

Comments

[akira17]

awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww
so cute

[opalmatrix]

Glad you liked it!

[lawless523]

Just writing a sonnet is an accomplishment in itself; writing one that fits Saiyuki and makes sense is even better. I particularly like the last two lines.

Congratulations!

[opalmatrix]

Thanks ... I've been feeling remarkably uncreative lately, so I was relieved to actually get through this one! Those lines are pretty satisfactory - I like the two before them as well. But a lot of the rest of it makes me go "meh."

[lawless523]

Keeping to the rhyme and rhythm scheme must be tough. Maybe part of your feeling of unease stems from the artificiality of some of the sentence construction and the old-fashioned nature of a few of the words.

[lady_ganesh]

Aww.

[purpleicicles]

The last two lines are awesome :)