This is totally random, and I don't know her nearly as well as you do, but - in the last half of paragraph five, Kain sounds a lot like Saeble to me O.o . And I LOOOOOOOVE your ending. The image is just so sweet! And your characterization is strong; it feels like you've put a lot of thought into all of the characters (even the boys who are only mentioned in passing). Little details - like the AP test thing - are great touches that also add to the characterization. There were a few points that I didn't really understand because I feel like I'm missing some backstory, but I didn't notice many typos :) . P4 - "his life depending on it" = depended And I get the feeling that MARISSA doesn't like late spring :P . <333
o_O He...really...DOES sound like Saeble. Wow xD; Geez.
I'm really glad you enjoy it! Embry's really easy to write with because I understand him a lot more. He's more open and such so it is a lot easier to get his thoughts and feelings across. KAIN is a handful and half, though, because he's rather complicated for me. I have a lot of trouble writing about him because sometimes -I- don't know how he would think or feel or act so I sit there and stare at the screen for long periods of time considering what seems to make the most sense. ^__^; Kain likes to be difficult for me.
And... YES. IM GLAD YOU NOTICED. xD; I hate late spring, I hate Summer. Embry gets it from me, he really does. Kain doesn't have much of a problem with heat...he's from Maryland. xD;
Anyway~ Thanks for reading and I'm really glad you liked it! <33333333333 Love you!
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And I LOOOOOOOVE your ending. The image is just so sweet! And your characterization is strong; it feels like you've put a lot of thought into all of the characters (even the boys who are only mentioned in passing). Little details - like the AP test thing - are great touches that also add to the characterization.
There were a few points that I didn't really understand because I feel like I'm missing some backstory, but I didn't notice many typos :) .
P4 - "his life depending on it" = depended
And I get the feeling that MARISSA doesn't like late spring :P .
<333
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Wow xD; Geez.
I'm really glad you enjoy it! Embry's really easy to write with because I understand him a lot more. He's more open and such so it is a lot easier to get his thoughts and feelings across. KAIN is a handful and half, though, because he's rather complicated for me. I have a lot of trouble writing about him because sometimes -I- don't know how he would think or feel or act so I sit there and stare at the screen for long periods of time considering what seems to make the most sense. ^__^; Kain likes to be difficult for me.
And...
YES.
IM GLAD YOU NOTICED.
xD; I hate late spring, I hate Summer.
Embry gets it from me, he really does.
Kain doesn't have much of a problem with heat...he's from Maryland. xD;
Anyway~
Thanks for reading and I'm really glad you liked it!
<33333333333 Love you!
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