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Be Happy, Baby (Chapter 3)

Jul 16, 2011 13:01

Title: Be Happy, Baby (Chapter 3)
Author: samberrie (itsa me)
Pairing: John/Paul and Geroge/Ringo and a lot John/George in this chapter, strictly platonic of course.
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Naughty language, pre-slash, angst, cracktasticness, and no Paul in this chapter. Apparently, he’s the only one getting any sleep in this fic.
Time Frame: Second ( Read more... )

Comments 7

jpgr1963 July 17 2011, 20:52:20 UTC

Really great update, dear! I love the all the hilarious lines - so perfect for John and George banter moments. And such a naughty Johnny!!! Last few lines were extremely good! I ADORE humor in fics. This does seem like it's going to get messy, though. ;)

Just two tiny things with love: I would avoid using the word "suck" - bit too American and current. And did they have electronic card keys to open hotels back then? My hunch is they didn't, bit I really don't know.

Anywho, nevermind me -- this was a fabulous chapter and now you've got me hooked so please update soon!

JP

samberrie July 17 2011, 21:21:35 UTC

Yay! I can't write without humour, it's so hard! When we were reading Romeo & Juliet forever ago in school, I couldn't take it seriously. We had to do these journal entries for either Romeo or Juliet, and all I did was mock them. XD My teacher still gave me a good grade though since it made her laugh so- SCORE ( ... )

jpgr1963 July 17 2011, 21:35:09 UTC

Oh, your humor is so fantastic - and how you relay it with your writing!

Yeah, it's hard sometimes. Obviously, I'm American too so I have to catch myself all the time. On the other hand, when I have to write an American (like Fred Seaman) I have to really think about how an American would say something in the 70s.

Hmm? Probably something like rubbish, but that's not quite right, is it? I use this guys site for British slang : http://www.effingpot.com/slang.shtml
No, not a poser at all, babe. Just takes a while to get it in your head when you hear them talking, that's all. And watching tons of films and video clips. And they probably had real keys, but?

WONDERFUL! I love rapid updates! You're dad's in the service? YEAH!!! My son's in the Army Reserves.

Chat with ya soon,
hon.

JP

samberrie July 17 2011, 22:16:03 UTC

Why thank you very much! I pride myself on making people laugh. Mostly I just write whatever would make me laugh and hope for the best ( ... )

beagle_agent July 20 2011, 19:23:33 UTC

Great update. And John's and George's banter is so terrific.

Astrid

samberrie July 21 2011, 18:14:06 UTC

Thank you very much Astrid! I'm a big fan of banter so I try and put it in as much as I can. :P

Glad you enjoyed this chapter!!

dark_princess25 January 12 2012, 01:32:34 UTC

OMG when John was walking into the dark room and tripping a little bit, I immediately thought of that scene in "Blazing Saddles" when Lily's trying to walk around in the dark to answer the door and she runs into a chair or something, and she like, "Gaddammit...." lol! I could totally picture him doing that.

And I could also picture him being all mischievous in front of Ringo like "I know sumthin' you don't know!" heheh

Good stuff, dude, awesome.