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"Creak" by nandamai

Aug 29, 2006 22:20

Title: Creak
Author: nandamai
Rating/Warning: PG
Spoilers: None
Recipient: Lyssie (lyssie)
Request details: "Sam with no backup."

( Creak )

drama, angst

Comments 36

anonymous September 2 2006, 06:08:38 UTC

Very nicely done, loved Sam's determination to remember who she was and her repeated attemps to get away.

nandamai September 6 2006, 02:35:21 UTC

Thank you! I really wanted to bring out that determination and perseverance. She always finds the answer, no matter how impossible it might seem.

I'm glad you liked it!

winterfish September 2 2006, 20:30:40 UTC

Nicely done! Really beautifully written! I love the repetition of the "chip chip chip" and how Sam remembers more of herself with each repeat. Loved Sam's determination to escape, and that she took the others with her.

nandamai September 6 2006, 02:37:33 UTC

Thanks! I spent a lot of time thinking about the tiny differences in each repetition. Originally it was only going to be Sam, but then Marab showed up and the other two came along and there was the story. I'm glad you liked it.

zorb September 3 2006, 05:01:17 UTC

I know it's really annoying when people do this, but boy, do I want a sequel for this one! You definitely leave us wanting more, but I'm content with just this glimpse into a very intriguing larger story. You convey a lot with few words, and I really enjoyed it.

nandamai September 6 2006, 02:39:11 UTC

Heh. It's a good thing you're content, because there will be no sequel. I prefer to leave you wanting more. :) Thanks for enjoying it!

siggy63 September 3 2006, 19:49:48 UTC

I'm with the previous poster. Gosh I'd love a sequel to this. Sam fighting alone but gathering support from those around her. great rhythm to this story and super OC's. Just fabulous all round. A sequel would make my day #looks pathetically at author#

nandamai September 6 2006, 02:41:01 UTC

Heh. Sorry, no sequel, but I'm glad you liked it, and especially that the rhythm worked for you. I was a little afraid of this story because I knew style was everything here and I worked myself up into a tizzy. Anyway, thanks, Siggy!

cofax7 September 3 2006, 19:57:19 UTC

Oh, that was really good. I loved the repetition of the circle, and that the only things she retains are her name and the circle/gate, over and over. And that regardless of how much she loses, she never gives up. Go Sam.

Good stuff.

Wanna know who these Jaffa were working for, and why they had to build a pyramid by hand...

nandamai September 6 2006, 02:45:17 UTC

Thanks Cofax! As I said somewhere above, I wanted the story to focus on Sam's natural stubborness (in a good way), and look at how she'd react when she couldn't depend on anybody else, even on her own memory.

Of course, the real reason they built the pyramid by hand was because I wanted to use the sound effects, but that's not as much fun as Goa'uld speculation.

Thanks again.