Title: The Geocentric Days Are Gone
Rating: PG
Pairing: Sam/Daniel (vaguely implied Sam/Jack)
Notes: Have I mentioned how awesome
thraesja is for not only putting up with my random emails, but also doing such an awesome job of beta reading?
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the geocentric days are gone / and earth is still a sphere )
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My only bit of concrit would be that as paragraph four opened, I thought Sam was calling Jack. Maybe instead of speaking "his number" with the 'he' in the preceding paragraph being Jack, she can speak "a number". Then reveal who she called three paragraphs later as you do.
Love this piece. Thank you for sharing it :)
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Changed that bit, thanks for pointing that out! (And for the record, I'm to blame for that - it was something I put in just before posting, or else I'm sure thraesja would have said the same thing.)
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I'm very glad you decided to post this piece instead of hanging onto it for eternity. It's simply lovely.
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First off, Jack named him so Iggy didn't sound too ridiculous coming from him. And... you know, I have no idea why it popped into my head. Maybe Ellen was playing in the background and my subconscious went into overdrive. :P
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Thank you for sharing this. :)
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