More Richer Than My Tongue, Chapter 1

[sanginmychains]

Title: More Richer than my Tongue - Chapter 1
Rating: This section PG-13, spots of NC-17 later on.
Pairing: Jack/Ianto
Notes, credits: Huge thanks to my betas invisible_lift, who saved me from my punctuation tics and helped untangle my POV furball, and blackbird_song, who fussed over my show vs. tell balance and also worked on the furball. That POV thing is a bitch. Much

Comments

[definehome]

Weee - you have a title. Congrats on taking the leap and posting. And I feel I can compliment you on this part, since I had no real input into it.

I love the slight voyeurism of Jack - watching something he is a little uncomfortable with it and experiencing the sympathy that he avoids expressing by pretending that he didn't see Ianto's grief.

[sanginmychains]

He avoids expressing sympathy, true, but also avoids responsibility for his actions. After all, he'd be in pretty big shit with Ianto if he were caught.

[plotbunniesinc]

Goodness, that was amazing.
I think I think I want to kill everything that ever hurt him, but I think everything that ever hurt him is already dead. Except me. has just become one of my favourite lines in any fic ever.
Just perfect.

[sanginmychains]

Thank you! It's a thought that came out of my "What it's like to be Jack Harkness" file.

[twfan14]

kool!!!
it's amzin!!!!

[demotu]

Yes! See, you can do plot without porn!

I loved Jack not respecting Ianto's privacy, very him, and Ianto's grief was beautifully harsh, as was Jack's thought: "No one is listening, Ianto. Trust me. I've tried." Ouch.

This had a very nice balance of grief and humour, I like it a lot. Part two in three days, you said? :D

[sanginmychains]

A bull in a china shop, and a raw nerve; it's an explosive combination. The post-Cyberwoman setup is very rich ground.

Thank you for the compliments; they mean a lot.

[angstosaur]

wow - incredibly well written. To be able to describe such raw emotion so powerfully and with such feeling is a gift - thank you for sharing its product!

I really love the way this story is starting out - I know Three Cliffs Bay on the Gower and it is a beautiful setting - the skies there are so moody.

I cannot wait for more - brilliant work!

[sanginmychains]

Fortunately there are a lot of pictures of Three Cliffs Bay available online; it is a gorgeous setting, I'd love to visit it myself.

How sad is it that I spent a full hour (maybe two) trolling the Internet reading camping review sites, Googlemap, etc., trying to find the perfect setting? I swear, I know more about the Welsh coastline than anyone needs to.

Thanks for the compliments. Conveying the emotion while staying within my self-prescribed bounds of pared-down prose, no figurative language, and extremely limited interior monologue is a challenge, and I'm glad to hear that it's working for you.

[thefannishwaldo]

Wow, this is just brilliant. I can't wait to see where this is going. More soon, please? :)

[sanginmychains]

Thank you. I have 5 parts written and beta'ed, ready to go out at 3-day intervals. The second beta should be getting back to me soon about chapters 6 and 7, and hopefully that buys me enough time to finish the section I'm currently working on. Posting was a bit of a leap of faith; up until a couple days ago, I wasn't at all confident of my ability to finish. I'm still not completely sure. Wish me luck.

[thefannishwaldo]

*3 days* Oi, you're evil! :)

And you'll get done. Or Jack will hunt you down with a can of Weevil spray and handcuffs... or is that more of an inducement to stall? :p