I know you pride yourself (with good reason) on your smut, but you've gotten so good at plot and drama, not to mention creating what amount to original characters in this universe.
The universe itself is very intriguing! I like the MU-with-a-twist, which for now we're only seeing through Jim's eyes. And I love that Bones is the ringleader and Jim the helpless one for a change (though I did happen to notice it took about two paragraphs before you got his shirt off). As in "Zing," you've got a classic rom-com dynamic going but manage to balance it with some more serious personal and societal issues, and the whole thing holds together so well!
And Bones dressed as Robin Hood...well, there IS that. So looking forward to the next part!
I did happen to notice it took about two paragraphs before you got his shirt off haha, I'm amazed it took me that long ;D
Unfortunately, much as I adore costume!porn, I've not really followed that muse, I hope you can find it in your heart to forgive me :D I got side-tracked by politics and stuff like that. Though there is LOTS of regular porn coming up, have no fear :D
Thank you sweetie, parts 3 and 4 are back from beta reading and I have a stack of edits to do which will make it better, so hopefully in a couple of days there will be lots more!
I don't have the time right now to give this the detailed feedback it deserves, but can I just say that I really love the tension you've created in what Jim and Bones are up to, exactly. Mirrorverse's Kirk/McCoy tropes have been pretty solidly established by now -- where McCoy is a soulful good guy or a delightfully evil doctor, and Kirk is a sexy wicked tyrant or the rare softhearted kiss addict (still one of my favorite things from you) -- and I love how you play with them here. You told us this is Mirrorverse!lite, but even so, McCoy is on the knife edge of healer-to-his-bones and my-my-what-have-we-here-fresh-meat and I LOVE it. I love that Kirk can't fucking figure these guys out, and I have to admit that I haven't yet either. On the one hand, the crew seem to be Doing Good, but on the other, they're violent psychopaths. McCoy seems to stand out as softer that the others, and you can see a potential plot where Kirk exploits what he perceives as McCoy's weaknesses as a leader and takes over the crew. Knowing what we know
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first of all, thank you soooo much for this amazing, detailed and thoughtful comment. *hugs* And I realise I forgot to link to this on issenterprise - my bad, I'll do that soon as I've posted this comment :D
I love how this has got you thinking about a bunch of different, really cool possibilities and I hope the final story lives up to some of your thinky thoughts. Fortunately for the depth of the fic, my beta, awarrington , is demanding that I think some of this stuff through so that it'll all hopefully make sense in the end, and she always raises the bar which is just as well because I make this stuff up as I go along :D
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The universe itself is very intriguing! I like the MU-with-a-twist, which for now we're only seeing through Jim's eyes. And I love that Bones is the ringleader and Jim the helpless one for a change (though I did happen to notice it took about two paragraphs before you got his shirt off). As in "Zing," you've got a classic rom-com dynamic going but manage to balance it with some more serious personal and societal issues, and the whole thing holds together so well!
And Bones dressed as Robin Hood...well, there IS that. So looking forward to the next part!
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Unfortunately, much as I adore costume!porn, I've not really followed that muse, I hope you can find it in your heart to forgive me :D I got side-tracked by politics and stuff like that. Though there is LOTS of regular porn coming up, have no fear :D
Thanks for you lovely comment, bb!
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Can't wait to read more!
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I love how this has got you thinking about a bunch of different, really cool possibilities and I hope the final story lives up to some of your thinky thoughts. Fortunately for the depth of the fic, my beta, awarrington , is demanding that I think some of this stuff through so that it'll all hopefully make sense in the end, and she always raises the bar which is just as well because I make this stuff up as I go along :D ( ... )
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