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[sanoken]

Title: Marigold
Pairing: Grimmjow/Izuru
Warnings: AU timeline based shortly after the current manga storyline- spoilers for everything that has happened and some things that haven't!
Rating: Currently PG-13(ish)
Half-credit to yashy

Comments

[blood_crow]

Someone I know recommended this story and I'm so glad they did. It's so well written and Grimmjow and Kira are so OOC. Normally I'm not that big of a fan when it comes to Kira, but I like him a lot in this fic. Grimm on the other hand is one of my fav bleach characters. I adore him in this fic, especially in this chapter. When he was tugging on the table leg it reminded me of a curious cat playing with yarn. And when he got upset at Izuru for being late..too cute.

One thing I was wondering about was that in the first chapter Kira told Grimm that Ichimaru was his ex-captain, but when he said it again in this chapter Grimm seemed surprised.

[sanoken]

He was repeating it in a "this is what you told me, right?" kind of way- like asking a question without needing an answer. That could probably use some editing- thanks for pointing it out.

And I'm glad you like it. <3 I was definitely going for the "bored cat" kind of behavior, so I'm glad it came across!

[blood_crow]

Oh sorry, I meant IC not OOC. They were so in* character. And that makes sense, thanks for explaining it!

[denshi_no_ultra]

Oh man, Kira, that's a dangerous game you are getting into there!

I like how you describe the development of their mutual interest, Grimmjow has nothing to do in the cell and gets really bored, no wonder he would get a fixation on Kira - Kira probably was the first person who treated him decently.

And I really liked how you compared their relationship with what Kira and Ichimaru had had - the danger and the lack of choice, I think, characterise that pretty well, I imagine that is how it could have been.

Thanks for writing!