Fic: All I Can See

[saphira_ll]

 Title: All I Can See
Author: saphira_ll
Prompt: New Years Eve
Rating: PG-13 (just to be safe)
Word Count: 1650
Warnings: DH spoilers, grieving, implied sexual relations
Author's Notes:  Written for  

Comments

[kerosinkanister]

I liked it, particularly the emotions at the start. If there's any crit the middle seemed bit rushed, going from nightmares to Hermione's parents in Australia to Hermione's dad's thoughts on Ron sleeping in the same room, with a couple paragraphs.

The resolution was sweet, and I thought the bit with Harry and Ginny was amusing as well.

[saphira_ll]

If there's any crit the middle seemed bit rushed, going from nightmares to Hermione's parents in Australia to Hermione's dad's thoughts on Ron sleeping in the same room, with a couple paragraphs.

I had actually had a lot more planned for that part but I just couldn't get it to come out the way I wanted. *sighs*

I'm glad you still liked it though. :D

[9t9]

That was very sweet and romantic. I like how you attend to details-it gave me a really strong mental image of what was going on. The end with Harry and Ginny is too funny!

[saphira_ll]

Thanks. I love detailed stories that you can see playing out in your mind like a movie. I try to describe the story as it unfolds in my minds eye.

I couldn't resist putting in a little humor at the end there, I'm glad you liked it. :D