Mistaken

[sasusc]

Title: Mistaken
Author: sasusc
Characters: River, Jayne
Prompt: #1 Fall
Challenge: Fall Challenge at rayne_shippersWord Count: 2262

Comments

[rjsteamboat76]

haha i liked this. some errors but i'm too lazy to point em out cuz the story itself was good. =)

[sunshineali]

Hi, You had me going. I thought River was watching Jayne cheat on her and I was so sad until he came along to reassure her. I loved that she was confused and was actually watching his brother. Those Cobb boys sure get around. You may want to go over this again when you have time as there were some errors here and there that momentarily took the reader away from the story, and it's too good of a story to be distracted from. Loved it and love how creative it was. :)Ali

[idyllictorture]

Nice. I didn't see the end coming. Figures River would see "converging reality" rather than a man who just looked like Jayne. :D Very cleverly done.

[basched]

Very nice story! I did think..aw it's gonna be a sad one because Jayne is cheating on her...but then yay, silly river! It was only his brother! Awesome, something that might be continued perhaps???

[marta_hari]

That was inspired. Very unique and well thought-out. You got River down pat!