PERSONAL SUN CHAPTER THREE

[saturnstars]

TITLE: Personal Sun

CHAPTER THREE: Alaska

SUMMARY: “I ignored Carmen’s worried face. No doubt the two were now wondering why I was upset. How should I explain it to them? That the fresh air and blood had caused me to forget Bella? I no longer thought on nothing but tasting her. I couldn’t even remember why she had been so desirable in the first place

Comments

[lauzg]

I absolutely adore this fanfiction!
There really are no words to describe how much I love reading Edward's POV.
Please continue as soon as you can...I am particularly looking forward to Edward's return and his interactions with Bella!
Your fan
Laura :)

[cglue]

I liked it. You're idea of the Denali clan is very interesting. I like that Tanya isn't throwing herself to Edward all the time, although she thinks about it a few times.

There's a few things I noticed while reading about Carmen and Eleazar that confused me and I hope you don't feel upset for mentioning them but your view of them is quite different from what says in the Twilight Lexicon. If I'm not mistaken, both have been around since 1005 and have been together for most part of their existence and Eleazar actually has a gift, which is unknown to us, and Carmen isn't a succubus like Tanya, Kate or Irina.

Besides that, it's a great chapter. I think you're doing a good job of portraying Edward. I hope to see a new chapter soon. ;)

[saturnstars]

oh really, I had no idea!

Thats fine I will rewrite that part and let you know when I have okay?

[harbourlight]

Hey. I haven't read this yet but I plan to when I get home tonight. I feel like such a stalker but yeah, I was going through all the entries on the QUT Piciwiki trying to find someone I share an interest with and I saw that you have a livejournal so I thought I would check it out.

And then I saw your Edward icon ;) And I just had to write a comment to say how cool it is that you like Twilight.

[saturnstars]

hey thats cool but who is this???

[harbourlight]

Sorry about that. I didn't realize how random and vague I was being.

My names Steph. We don't know each other but yeah, I was just trying to put off working on my assignment and I found your journal. I'm always looking for good Twilight fanfiction and found it funny that I stumbled across some through uni. I really loved reading it. You write Edwards POV really well.

Thats my profile thing btw > https://wiki.qut.edu.au/display/piciwiki/STEPHANIE+EMMETT

[saturnstars]

wow thats awesome, I will have more motivation to update now because a fellow uni student wants to read it.

Glad you liked it

[love_evee]

wow. this is great!
i'm thirsty for more.. *wink*