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The Egyptian - Malik/OFC, NC-17

Jun 13, 2011 18:13

Title: The Egyptian
Author: savorvrymoment
Pairing: Malik/OFC
Rating: NC-17
Wordcount: ~5500
Spoilers: Assassin's Creed (1)
Summary: "He sits by the fountain and bathes, doing his best to wash away the smells of the brothel, of sex, and of her. Somehow, he still goes to sleep with a strange hint of Egyptian spice clinging to his skin."
Warnings for explicit ( Read more... )

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savorvrymoment June 14 2011, 15:29:40 UTC

Fixed!--I knew that sentence didn't look right, oh well. Should have taken you up on that beta offer. Didn't want to bother you since you were betaing for a big bang, that's hard work ( ... )

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savorvrymoment June 14 2011, 21:27:51 UTC

That's probably how it's meant... That makes sense written out like that. Thanks for the help!

wanderingflame June 17 2011, 02:06:00 UTC

So I finally have a chance to sit down and leave my thoughts and I realize that I have loved everything you've posted here and yet I've never commented. Incredible shame, I has it.

Anyway, I will try to cover all the parts I loved about this and hopefully not leave anything out.

Firstly, I am (sadly) one of those people what has a knee-jerk reaction to seeing "Known Character/Original Character" in the pairings line. All too often, it's a very obvious MarySue, but Hala felt so real in this, it was like she was an overlooked part of the first game, a character who'd been hiding in the wings the whole time.

This is probably my favorite line ever from a fic: “Lest I have to tell Al Mualim that I found you stabbed to death just outside the bureau. What a shame that would be.” I really enjoyed their interactions, especially after Masyaf is re-taken ( ... )

savorvrymoment June 17 2011, 02:21:20 UTC

You are so sweet! Thanks for leaving such a wonderful, detailed comment. I really had very little expectation as far as anyone reading this--I'm the same as you, I often pass fics right over that are Known Character/OC. And I can't blame people for doing so, they almost always are Mary Sue-ish. But I wanted to write this fic to fill the bingo square, and since I did, I figured I'd share it anyway. I'm glad you enjoyed.

(Fixing the Sa'di/Sa'bi thing now. Yes, that was a typo.)

As for the kink bingo, it's a challenge community run over on dreamwidth. Here's a link. The main bingo round runs through the summer until September, I think. You sign up for a card, and then work to fill bingos and such. There's a lot more info on the site. That, and they do smaller challenges through the rest of the year. It's a pretty cool thing--and from what I've seen, very very popular. :-)

wanderingflame June 22 2011, 23:21:55 UTC

I always try to leave detailed feedback because I know that's usually preferable to just babbling. Of course, then I looked back on this and thought it looked like babbling anyway. Anyway!

I will definitely check out that community! Thank you for the link. I barely have enough time to write as it is, but I do enjoy challenge communities. :3