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saywheeeee

fic: keep her lustrous eyes

Jun 17, 2010 00:27

title: keep her lustrous eyes

pairing: eleven/amy

genre: angst/drama/romance

rating: teen

summary: Amy Pond is drowning.

( You’re in the Void. You’re almost gone. I’ve got you. Don’t move. Stay calm. I’m coming. )

fan:fic, series:stand_alone_au

Comments 42

snappop June 17 2010, 04:51:59 UTC

Oh. Oh. That was absolutely fantastic! I love how you faked us out with the ending; the fairytale kiss doesn't work, talking about how it doesn't hurt to die, but then where one kind of expression of love doesn't work, another does. The transitions between each section are really well crafted and I just LOVE the bit about it being the old part of him that knows it won't work (and the implication that it's the young part of him that tries any way). And this broke my heart (one of the many times its broke in this fic): His left hand finds hers in the midst of all of this furor, and he finds he cannot let go.

Aaaaah, it was just lovely all around. I do so love your fics; it's really a crime that this is the first I've commented.

saywheeeee June 17 2010, 15:59:10 UTC

Hee hee hee.

I totally faked you out didn't I.

You know I couldn't kill the magnificent Amy Pond, silly. I've tried to write deathfics and I am physically incapable of doing it. My brain chemistry will not allow me to type "And then she died, the end." I mean, except for right there. But that's just a comment, it's not some sort of tiny!fic.

(Worst. Tiny!fic. Ever.)

I'm very glad you enjoyed the story. Thanks for commenting! :)

pictash June 17 2010, 04:59:35 UTC

I was seriously gawking at my computer screen for like two minutes after I finished this. It's extremely powerful and beautifully written. I love it, and I love you for writing it.

saywheeeee June 17 2010, 15:59:42 UTC

Hurray! I love you too!

southernrogue47 June 17 2010, 04:59:54 UTC

Oh, I adore this. I have no idea what's going on, but that doesn't matter because it is sweet and sad and beautiful and hopeful. <3 (I'll read it again, just because of that and also to figure it out. :P)

saywheeeee June 17 2010, 16:04:01 UTC

Yeah, I had a tricky time figuring out how much plot explanation to put in here, because for Amy and the Doctor, how they got in this situation isn't the pressing thing at the moment, it's how to get out. The way I imagine it, Amy was kidnapped by some aliens who (for some reason or another) tried to use a device to split her mind from her body and throw it into the Void, but the Doctor was able to turn off the device in time to (he hopes) drag Amy's mind back out of the Void by getting its attention through her body. Of course she looks and feels dead, so he had no idea if he has a chance. But I didn't want to spend a whole paragraph blathering on about that when I could use that space to have lots of nice Doctor angst instead. I'm sure you understand. XD

southernrogue47 June 17 2010, 16:56:48 UTC

Oh, yes. Doctor angst always takes first priority. :D

saywheeeee June 17 2010, 18:18:12 UTC

My brain politely handed me the sentence "I like to have Doctor angst on toast," but I'm not sure what to do with it, so I'll just pass it on to you.

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_tehrin June 17 2010, 05:27:58 UTC

This was so beautiful! I especially loved how you bounced back and forth between the Doctor's POV and Amy's. Brilliant! I was near tears towards the end!

saywheeeee June 17 2010, 17:17:07 UTC

Thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed!

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saywheeeee June 17 2010, 17:17:17 UTC

Thanks. :)