Bad Writing and Mary Sues: RIVAL's Original Ending

[sbennettwealer]

In some reviews of RIVAL, readers have said they wanted to know more about what happens with Brooke and Kathryn, Actually, my first version of the story ended with an epilogue that revisited the two girls as adults to see where both ended up. I didn't show the results of the Blackmore, rather I stopped just as both girls were getting ready to step

Comments

[tamarak]

Oh, this was so fun! Thanks for posting.

[robinellen]

Oh, I'm so glad you shared this! Although I loved the ending as is, this is also beautiful :)