Watchmen fic: Intervention

[scarlet_carsons]

Title: Intervention
Characters: Laurie, Jon.
Rating: Mature, but only due to the usual vigilante violence. Gen.
Word count: 1277
Summary: Jon interferes.

Comments

[clodia_metelli]

Oh, I like that a lot: it's rather funny, in a horrible way, and also a direct insight into why they were together and why they fell apart. Jon doesn't really understand and Laurie is too strong and perhaps slightly too scarred to be only his girlfriend, only there to be happy for him. Very nice: thank you!

[scarlet_carsons]

Noo, thank you!

Jon doesn't really understand and Laurie is too strong and perhaps slightly too scarred to be only his girlfriend, only there to be happy for him.

Yeah - I always imagined that she'd be under a lot of pressure to be happy for him, too. The more I think about the relationship, the ickier it gets.

[clodia_metelli]

The more I think about the relationship, the ickier it gets.

I rather agree. The surprising thing is that it lasted as long as it did.

[scarlet_carsons]

Now you mention it, I do wonder if she was deterred from leaving him sooner because it was in everybody's best interest to keep him happy.

For all the movie's flaws, I did like her 'I don't want that responsibility' line.

[whiskerslily]

I like that this shows that Laurie is (once again, just like with her mother) being "sheltered", and maybe that isn't the best thing for her in the long run. This just gets even creepier since Laurie's been involved with Jon since she was 16, so she's never really had the chance to just do things on her own/have any sort of agency besides beating people up/even try out different guys to date or whatever. There are lots of icky factors in Jon/Laurie, and Jon treating Laurie like a child here (even though he may be concerned, but . . . still) interesting. Very cool.

[scarlet_carsons]

Thanks. :)

This just gets even creepier since Laurie's been involved with Jon since she was 16, so she's never really had the chance to just do things on her own/have any sort of agency besides beating people up/even try out different guys to date or whatever.

Heh, yeah. I've always seen Jon as a very passive guy, and I can imagine teenage Laurie as being a bit fierce, but there's still such a massive power difference between them, I have to wonder how healthy the relationship could've been. (Still, to Jon's credit, Laurie did seem to have a lot of trust in him, even if he was a ditz who forgot to provide air on Mars. I think they must have been a pretty happy couple when, y'know, Laurie could tolerate the fact that he was an inhuman superbeing.)

[dessieoctavia]

Very apt. This must have been what it was like between them, yes.

And it's a nice look into the frustrations of a relationship with someone who is just not a normal human. If Laurie had had a normal boyfriend who couldn't have stopped her from shooting the punk, she might have done so and she would have regretted it and been messed up by it, but that's... a comparatively normal sort of problem. To have a demigod stop you from making your mistakes at all - it has its advantages, sure, but it's not something people are really "wired" to deal with.

I always felt like Laurie was overreacting in the GN when she dumped Jon for working at the same time as he was in bed with her. This puts it in better perspective; she didn't dump him for that, she left because of years of accumulated frustrations with things that he wasn't any longer able to understand would bother a normal human.

In sum, good fic!

[scarlet_carsons]

To have a demigod stop you from making your mistakes at all - it has its advantages, sure, but it's not something people are really "wired" to deal with.

To be honest, if Jon was my boyfriend, I'd probably end up tearing my hair out. I think Laurie must've had a very high tolerance for weirdness.

Thank you! :D

[iteari]

I liked the exchange between the two of them. Laurie comes off as being "shielded" too much and it frustrates her and Jon comes off so annoyingly paternal it's a little wrong...don't know how else to say it.

[scarlet_carsons]

Thanks. :) Heh, yeah, the relationship always gave me Electra complex vibes, given their age difference and Laurie's absent father.

(For the record, I don't think Jon's a bad guy, just... kind of a massive dork. "I'm going to leave my long-term girlfriend for a 16-year old. That's a great idea!" "Wait, you don't like surprise clone gangbangs? Oh." "Yes, I was working while I was meant to be spending time with you. What's the problem?" "I know I'm an important military asset, but I'm going to abandon Earth because my girlfriend has left me. I think I'll go wallow in manpain on Mars." And so on.)

[mustinvestigate]

"The roof of the Supreme Court building," says Jon. "Without his clothes."

Heh. Good imitation of a sense of humor, Jon.

I really like this, the way it shows that Laurie has a frustrated layer of steel inside her that never got properly exercised or developed. She could have gone off the rails like her father (or like her mother, in a different way), or it could have grown into a great strength that balanced ethics and practicalty - if only her self-appointed carers had let her attempt adulthood on her own.

[scarlet_carsons]

Thank you. :)

if only her self-appointed carers had let her attempt adulthood on her own.

Ow. Yes. She was kind of doomed from the start, really. I guess that, in some ways, she's a bit like a more realistic, adult version of Hit Girl.

(I've lost the link, but I really liked that short AU fic on the kinkmeme where Laurie wasn't pretty enough to follow in Sally's footsteps, so she took care of unwanted animals and was relatively contented with her lot in life.)