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homestuck -- and turns me to gold in the sunlight

Oct 24, 2011 01:33

title: and turns me to gold in the sunlight
wordcount: 1932
rating: PG
warnings: character death
summary: So this is how her world ends, after countless sweeps of conquest.
notes: written for the homestuck kink meme. My formatting is getting weird; I am currently in the midst of overhauling like my entire journal orz.
prompt: "I'm surprised this hasn't ( Read more... )

genre: years in the future but not many, *fandom: homestuck, genre: eridan talks large, character: ensemble (hs), genre: silly character stuff, *warning: character death, genre: morbid morbid morbid, pairing: shiiiiiptease, genre: existential kids korner, genre: feferi takes charge, character: her imperious condescension, genre: sadstuck, genre: everybodydiesstuck, genre: life after sgruburb, character: trolls, pairing: eridan/feferi, genre: angstmachine, character: feferi peixes, genre: crapsack world, genre: ritual executions for everyone!

Comments 6

kashii_ai October 23 2011, 23:05:17 UTC

Uwaaah, this was wonderful. I loved it. It was noble and sad, and your writing is really good. Keep up the good work. :D

scenotaphs October 24 2011, 02:35:16 UTC

Ahhhh thank you very much for reading and commenting! It's much appreciated. I'm glad you liked it c:

acerbictomes October 25 2011, 01:07:16 UTC

Wow, this was amazing. I loved the parallels between the Condesce and Feferi and the Condesce and the Handmaid, and the troll ceremonies had this certain sense of ritual about them that was just awesome. Your Empress-voice is really lyrical, with a certain cadence to the words that I really liked.

scenotaphs October 25 2011, 02:31:14 UTC

Ah, thank you kindly. The Empress is indeed someone all bound up in ritual and tradition, it's only fitting that she observes them to the very end. The three of them make for quite a dynamic, especially the Condesce and the Handmaid -- both powerful and widely feared, but on opposite ends of the spectrum. Thank you for reading and commenting!

smallbutevil October 28 2011, 10:10:26 UTC

I think I'll have to second that 'wow'! I especially loved your fish 'puns', precisely because worked- they didn't seem forced, or that you were shoehorning your writing to fit in with the canon's information, if that makes sense. The description of the shore and execution place was so vivid I could just see it in my mind's eye, too - many writers neglect to describe settings with more than the sense of sight, so I liked your tactile, olfactory and auditory descriptions.

scenotaphs October 28 2011, 15:07:19 UTC

Oh you, thank you so much! And yes, you make perfect sense, and I'm really glad you think so. Puns aren't really my strong point, ahaha, so it's pretty nice to hear that I didn't fail dismally in that regard. It's also very heartening to hear that you could envision everything as I hoped it would come across, because part of the impact of it is the setting and all, I guess.

Once again, thank you for taking the time to read and comment!