Wk 8 lit entry

[scherae]

"...And they showed me a world where I could be so dependable, clinical, intellectual, cynical..." Supertramp, The Logical Song

OTL I need some catching up to do. Faaaaaaaast. Straight to the entry. Maybe I should so some planning about what to write during class time so I'm not so lost ^^|| And gah, drama groups *nervous laughter... stage fright

Comments

Great Poem!

[germaineperez]

I really enjoyed reading your livejournal entry for this week! Your use of descriptive imagery as well as your use of rhyming presents the poem in an entertaining form and clearly depicts your own interpretation of it! You were really creative with your poem and I especially liked how you inserted the humpty dumpty nursing rhyme in each stanza. To add to that, I must give you a huge thumbs up for thinking about basing your livejournal entry on something as simple as a nursery rhyme and writing something hugely creative! I think you inspired me with some great ideas about what I myself can base my future livejournal entries on!

Well done again and keep up the good work!

- Germaine

Re: Great Poem!

[scherae]

Thank you for your comment, I really appreciate it!

Yay, I'm inspiring people ^^ I'm going to regurgitate a bit of our good ol' text book here, but take whatever you can, anything at all, and transform it into your own =]

[briannacoleman]

I can't even name what it is I like about this poem, but I just do. Especially "To work his mind such as a bike". I guess I'd like to know what inspired you to write this poem? It makes me think of the things we've been reading lately, all these people contemplating life and getting so serious about what it means and how we should be living it. Do these people think about it so much that they too break? Do they reach a certain point, where they overanalyse things so much that they're on the brink of insanity, being unable to be put back together again? That's what your poem reminds me of anyway. I'm probably way off. Nontheless, I liked it very much.
Take care.
Brianna.

[scherae]

Thanks for the comment, Brianna!

-I guess I'd like to know what inspired you to write this poem?-
For some reason, before "sleeping" I began to think of random thoughts and I don't know why, I just thought about Humpty Dumpty then made some interpretations and stories for him, lol.

Zing! You're right on the mark for most of the issues, although there are more things to add, hurhur xD Really, interpret the poem as you will; the "wrong" answer can be the most correct or better answer than the right one (lol, this doesn't really make sense :P) :)

[sallylim]

Hey Raelene!

This an excellent piece of writing, because its is very well structured. Throughout this poem, you portray a sophisticated sense of vocabulary thus enabling the reader to comprehend and enjoy your writing. You have chosen words that fit perfectly to what you are describing which in effect defines your piece of writing in a more detailed way. In lines 2, 3, 4 and 5 you have created a detailed meaning in a simple way, yet it demonstrates your unique and profound thoughts.

[michaelgriffith]

Scherae- perfect!... this is a great way to approach dealing with your creative difficulties- grab a poem you know and rewrite it according to your inclinations... and hey presto - it works!!! So you have found a way through your own difficulty... no reason why you can't try this again...
Well done
MG

[whatchman2]

greetings earthling, very nice journal have you.

[scherae]

why hello there, thanks very much for your comment :)
the same goes to your journal as well :D