Problem Squared is the unofficial sequel to AvocadoLove's "The Problem with Zuko" I use it to tease her with plot ideas when we chat online, and she's given me permission to really write it (if I can manage to get around to it XD). Regardless, here's an excerpt as promised
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So this one is cheating as I have only the idea written down (hence the subtitle plotbunny) The idea here is that after the episode "The Mirror", which is my favorite episode, Eliza suffers lingering effects of Puck's magic.
Once touched by the fae, their mark never truly leaves you.
Particularly for one such as Eliza, whose entire life was deeply steeped in myth and magic.
It began slowly, she slept more during the day and was more active at night. Her hearing became sharper, her muscles stronger.
Backstory? This idea comes straight from Sillof's website. http://www.sillof.com/index.htm Specifically this line of figures http://www.sillof.com/C-SW-western.htm As you can see on the site, he makes all his own custom figures. The ones that drew me in were the 'Gaslight Justice League". Anyways, Western Wars.
Luke slammed his fists onto the table, knocking over his drink. "We have to stop him! I won't let Vardas go any further!"
"Easy kid, we'll get him." Hank tipped his chair back and propped his boots on the table, ignoring Clarence's fussing about mud and stains. "He has to come through this town, and when he does we'll be ready."
Luke glared at the rouge, "Like how Bennet was ready?"
My hope is that if you write this, you will do a little more research/justice to the idea of Chewbacca as an American Indian than the guy who made the figures did. ;-) Not that I think he had bad intentions, but... yeah.
it looks really promising so far and the basic prose seems solid. You need to make friends with your commas a bit more, though. ;-)
I know what you mean, and yes I would look into it more deeply. Actually I had the idea of Chewbacca's character being wounded in that he is unable to speak. Reminiscent of how he can't speak English in the movies.
Ah yes, my Avatar/The Thing crossover. I could post the beginning scene I've written. But how about this instead.
Iroh let loose a steady stream of fire to keep the monster at bay. "Zuko, leave now!" Zuko fought against Sokka and Katara as they pulled out of the engine room. "No! No I won't go without you!" "You must! Now go!" with that Iroh kicked the door shut and Zuko heard the bolt lock. He threw himself at the door but Sokka was able to knock him off balance and, hoisting him over his shoulder, took off down the corridor at a dead run. Just as Zuko fought his way free there the engine room exploded, the pressure blasting the door open and throwing the three teens down the rest of the hall. As the force of the explosion hit Zuko he felt, more than heard, Iroh's last words. "You will not have my son!"
The outline being that they had to make sure it was completely destroyed and, after cornering it in the engine room, blowing up the engine is the only way to generate enough fire to kill it. So Iroh sent lightning into the engine to detonate it.
And yeah, wrote that scene just now, from my head. I love doing that.
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Once touched by the fae, their mark never truly leaves you.
Particularly for one such as Eliza, whose entire life was deeply steeped in myth and magic.
It began slowly, she slept more during the day and was more active at night. Her hearing became sharper, her muscles stronger.
But soon, it was clear.
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Luke slammed his fists onto the table, knocking over his drink. "We have to stop him! I won't let Vardas go any further!"
"Easy kid, we'll get him." Hank tipped his chair back and propped his boots on the table, ignoring Clarence's fussing about mud and stains. "He has to come through this town, and when he does we'll be ready."
Luke glared at the rouge, "Like how Bennet was ready?"
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it looks really promising so far and the basic prose seems solid. You need to make friends with your commas a bit more, though. ;-)
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How about this.
Goliath laid a hand on her shoulder, "You are...well?"
Eliza looked at her hands where fingers were slowly fuzeing together. Biting her lip, feeling her new fangs, "As well as can be expected." She said.
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Iroh let loose a steady stream of fire to keep the monster at bay.
"Zuko, leave now!"
Zuko fought against Sokka and Katara as they pulled out of the engine room. "No! No I won't go without you!"
"You must! Now go!" with that Iroh kicked the door shut and Zuko heard the bolt lock.
He threw himself at the door but Sokka was able to knock him off balance and, hoisting him over his shoulder, took off down the corridor at a dead run.
Just as Zuko fought his way free there the engine room exploded, the pressure blasting the door open and throwing the three teens down the rest of the hall. As the force of the explosion hit Zuko he felt, more than heard, Iroh's last words.
"You will not have my son!"
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Awww, sounds like Iroh just took one for the team. Unlike the opening scene in the movie, I'm sure he would be a match for a scary dog/Thing. :D
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And yeah, wrote that scene just now, from my head. I love doing that.
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