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sciencekitty

Nobody But the Baby

Oct 15, 2007 01:24

You’ve just started chapter three of The Adventures of Tom Sawyer when you hear a light knock on your bedroom door. Barely audible over the traveling sounds of your parents’ angry voices, it lets you know that their fighting has once again woken your little sister. Sure enough, the knob turns and two small feet appear in the widening triangle of ( Read more... )

fanfic, csi fic

Comments 14

katy_moon_beam October 15 2007, 06:29:56 UTC

*nods*

Sara and her brother :) Love it, honey. Interestingly, Sara and her brother play a large-ish part in the Elodie sequel, which is now reaching its final furlong.

Love him trying to keep her happy and distracted. What a sweetheart. Wish he was someone who they had actually thought to let us meet in canon!!!

*Warrick-hugs!*

sciencekitty October 15 2007, 15:21:05 UTC

Thanks so much! *Returns Warrick hugs*

I wish we could meet him in canon too. I just feel like Sara had to have someone there for her, and I've always liked the idea of her having a protective older brother.

I can't wait to see your sequel pop up! :)

kosmickway October 15 2007, 12:08:49 UTC

Very nice. You've got a strong, assured, confident tone to your writing. Character development is excellent. I like the idea of Sara having a brother ... is that canon? I can't remember? Either way, you paint it very nicely.

Great work and congrats on your first post here!

sciencekitty October 15 2007, 15:33:22 UTC

Thanks so much, that really means a lot! I'm still new to the whole fic thing, so I hoped this was good enough to post at the comm. :)

I can't remember the ep, but Sara mentioned to Grissom that she had a brother at some point, so he is canon, at least until TPTB decide to change their minds. :)

ellenkhursh October 15 2007, 18:41:00 UTC

"One Hit Wonder" (the one with Elizabeth Mitchell). "When I was a kid I was playing hide-and-seek one day and I found this plastic bag under my big brother's bed. I thought it was a bag of dirt so I took it to my mom. Turned out it was his bag of weed. He was grounded for a year."

sciencekitty October 15 2007, 19:42:13 UTC

Ahh, right! I remember now. :)

buffyangellvr23 October 15 2007, 14:30:58 UTC

very nice :)

sciencekitty October 15 2007, 15:22:02 UTC

Thank you! :)

butterfliedgsr October 15 2007, 20:01:34 UTC

Really wonderful, very in character

sciencekitty October 15 2007, 20:13:51 UTC

Thank you so much! :)

serialbathera October 16 2007, 21:04:22 UTC

very nice fic :)

sciencekitty October 16 2007, 21:43:05 UTC

Thanks so much! :)