I told you some things before but...disanddatApril 3 2008, 15:36:20 UTC
I like 'blank' better than gifted. It makes her less ideal/perfect.
The kids interact like kids. Keen gear. Sammy's heel drumming makes me smile. Eating donut off the ground... kinda gross, but it illustrates her hunger.
Sam's Krycek-pouting, yeap, I like that. Dean's affection/annoyance with his father reads beautifully.
I think that bit about right after Sam's en-tube-ment is new, right? Good idea. You always need to circle back to the Winchesters to anchor the story.
I like this piece. I like the ranch. I like Dean and Callie's interaction. You did good, baby girl.
Re: I told you some things before but...phantomasApril 4 2008, 23:24:17 UTC
Glad you like the 'blank' thing :D It's also a tiny brick in a bigger construction ;)
Sam is totally jealous of Krycek, LOL...or maybe he's jealous of Dean *G* I wanted to intro the slave concept, too, which will tie into the Screamers' concept at some point...hopefully
Yep, that bit is new :) *preeens and twirls for you :D*
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The kids interact like kids. Keen gear. Sammy's heel drumming makes me smile. Eating donut off the ground... kinda gross, but it illustrates her hunger.
Sam's Krycek-pouting, yeap, I like that. Dean's affection/annoyance with his father reads beautifully.
I think that bit about right after Sam's en-tube-ment is new, right? Good idea. You always need to circle back to the Winchesters to anchor the story.
I like this piece. I like the ranch. I like Dean and Callie's interaction. You did good, baby girl.
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It's also a tiny brick in a bigger construction ;)
Sam is totally jealous of Krycek, LOL...or maybe he's jealous of Dean *G* I wanted to intro the slave concept, too, which will tie into the Screamers' concept at some point...hopefully
Yep, that bit is new :)
*preeens and twirls for you :D*
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