Original Work: In Memoriam

[scyrlin]

Title: In Memoriam
Author: woodra
Rating: PG-13 to mild R depending on an individual
Disclaimer: Mine, with an exception of one line, properly credited.

Comments

[dreamking]

i liked it. but there's something... off here. it's missing some intangible thing that your writing usually has.
perhaps i was just distracted during my reading of it.
it's a good story, though.

[scyrlin]

I know what you mean - I think it could be explained by the fact that I didn't have the spare time to develop it well. I just had to get rid of the story in my head to live normally, so I put it down like that, without working hard on it, as I usually do with other short stories of mine. But it makes me glad you read my stories so well that you can already tell when there's something off - it's invaluable. Thank you.

[dreamking]

ah, that is what it felt like. like it didn't have enough of your soul in it.