VAMPIRE KNIGHT FANFIC: Midnight Pudding

[se12es]

Title: Midnight Pudding
Author: Serenity-sama / TsukiKamiKira
Rating: M
Pairing: Kaname x Yuki x Kaname (cause hes submissive and I wish he'd suck on her again in the manga)
Genre: VK!Smut Oneshot #1 / Post Chapter 37-38-39(?)
Warnings: SPOILERS!! If you aren't up to date with the manga, at the time this is written (chapter 39) don't read any

Comments

[sagakure]

I really liked how the blood drinking was pleasurable for them, and the details like Kaname moaning under the feeling of her teeth in his neck, and her letting him hear the sound of the blood better since it's an extra turn on for them. X3 It was both kinky and worked with the whole vampire settings of the series, since they did mention things like the sound of blood a lot. :D

Like you said, it's a pity the pudding didn't get eaten, but hopefully after they wake up? XD

As for fixing it before reposting, and if you want/don't mind my two cents, I find that the fic could become cooler with some revisions like typos, repetitions and some wording choices here and there. :D (There's also better parts and weaker parts in it, but revisiting that might take more time, and I don't know how much time you plan to put in it before reposting, since that type of thing can always be time consuming

[se12es]

o ya, the school uniform thing was an error. i originally wasnt gonna have him in uniform but changed it last minute..making that mistake. and ill have to fix it.my intention was for him to be wearing dark clothes...i think ive seen him in dark dress shirts before..hm

id definately refine it more before posting,even though i spent a good 2-3 hours trying to fix parts here and there. if you have any ideas itd be so helpful!!

[sagakure]

I thought it might be a last minute change, those usually do that to me too. XD I thought maybe you had him in that pretty dark coat he was wearing, and then changed it to the uniform? :D

[se12es]

Okay I'll think about it before I post to ffnet!

I also might reintroduce the pudding somewhere, lol.

Thanks!

And Kaname looks hot in anything =.= even nothing.. he needs to be drawn with no shirt already!!! any takers..any? XD

[jade_kinneas]

Ah what a cute story. ^_^ too bad it's a one shot. But I enjoyed it nonetheless.

[se12es]

arigatou! ty for reading, it needs alot of work still but :X

Wow

[shirshir1112]

Really NICE job....
You didn't do like she didn't care about Zero' but in the same time you can see clearly that Kaname is much more important to her...
Plus the ending is lovely.