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Beneath the Armor, by Nix

Jan 17, 2008 19:26

TITLE: Beneath the Armor
AUTHOR: Nix (keparker AT shaw DOT ca)
WRITTEN FOR: tmelange
FANDOM/COMIC TITLE: Avengers
CHARACTERS/PAIRING: Steve Rogers/Tony Stark (Captain America/Iron Man)
CATEGORY: Slash
RATING: PG
SUMMARY: Tony is forced to reveal his identity after his armor is compromised and Steve finds himself reevaluating his teammate.
DISCLAIMER: Not ( Read more... )

Comments 51

tmelange February 2 2008, 21:58:51 UTC

This was wonderful!. Not only did I love the plot, and the tension as it built in different directions (Tony's injury; the relationship) but I loved your characterizations and character development. I really got a feel for what each guy was feeling--Steve's worry and realization; Tony's fear that Steve would now think less of him. I think you did an outstanding job with this story, and the ending was the *best*. I also loved your Thor, who always makes me laugh.

You rocked this like a rock star! Thank you for writing and sharing with us. Bravo.

crimsonquills February 4 2008, 00:02:31 UTC

Yay! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, especially since it was written for you. :-) I know you said in your request that I didn't have to hits all the points you mentioned, but I couldn't resist trying. *grins* I was really happy with the way it came together.

Not only did I love the plot, and the tension as it built in different directions (Tony's injury; the relationship)

I'm so glad the tension built properly. I was terribly worried, as I wrote it, that I wasn't building the relationship well enough. I usually start on the assumption that the characters are already in love with each other, but this story was more about Steve's feelings deepening as he comes to understand Tony Stark and Iron Man as two parts of a whole person. Developing new feelings is way, way harder than revealing existing ones!

but I loved your characterizations and character development. I really got a feel for what each guy was feeling--Steve's worry and realization; Tony's fear that Steve would now think less of him.*beams* I was buried in 60's and early 70's ( ... )

bradygirl_12 February 3 2008, 06:08:13 UTC

I love Early Avengers, Crimson! (Is that like Early American decor? ;) Sorry, it's late! LOL!)

You've got their voices right from what I remember. Heh, I figured Dr. Don Blake would show up for that surgery! And Steve's jealousy was cute and I love his sappiness, 'cause that's Steve! :)

I did like that bit about burning his artist's hands! *pets the star-spangled woobie*

Tony is a delight here as well.

I like to think that Early Avengers can certainly be serious, but they did enjoy a lighter tone back then.

I really enjoyed reading this! :)

crimsonquills February 4 2008, 00:25:05 UTC

I love Early Avengers, Crimson!

*grins* I thought you might! Thought I didn't set it all the way in the 60's, but one takes what one can get. :-)

You've got their voices right from what I remember.

Yay! I was pretty immersed in 60's and early 70's canon at the time I wrote this, so I did wonder if the voices would feel off to people who are used to the current canon. But, thankfully, Marvel has been pretty consistent through time, so while the tone is different, it isn't so wildly different that people can't recognize and enjoy the characaters.

Heh, I figured Dr. Don Blake would show up for that surgery!

It was very convenient to have Thor's alter-ego be a doctor. *g* Although it did cause me a moment of possible plot problem when I realized that it would make more sense for him to stay with Tony while his armor was melting than for Steve to stay. Then I remembered that they don't know that his alter ego is a doctor and they're under time pressure, and it all fell into place. :-)

And Steve's jealousy was cute and I love his ( ... )

grayfoxinabox February 3 2008, 21:35:06 UTC

I absolutely love this. I love the Classic Avengers, while I do appreciate and prefer the more modern comics, every time I get something from the sixties I'm usually grinning the entire way through it, especially the few times I've gotten my hands on old Avengers comics!

This does capture the feel very well, and I think there should be more 'Classic Avengers in the 90's era' type things. They are all certainly worth revisiting and bringing into the modern days!

I also like your Tony, and the way we see him entirely through Steve's eyes, and the way people have to point things out to Steve because he doesn't always pick up on everything.

And the way Steve thinks of Iron Man before he knows who is in the armor is also very well done. And that part about wanting to see the smirk that he often heard in Iron Man's voice was really one of my favorite parts.

crimsonquills February 4 2008, 01:15:02 UTC

I love the Classic Avengers, while I do appreciate and prefer the more modern comics, every time I get something from the sixties I'm usually grinning the entire way through it, especially the few times I've gotten my hands on old Avengers comics!

*grins* I know the feeling! I'm reading my way through the Avengers back canon on DVD right now and I usually end up grinning helplessly through the issues and occasionally laughing out loud. *g* They're a ridiculous amount of fun.

This does capture the feel very well

*beams* Thank you so much!

I also like your Tony, and the way we see him entirely through Steve's eyes, and the way people have to point things out to Steve because he doesn't always pick up on everything.

Steve definitely has some blindspots, more than a few of them having to do with Tony. But it's good for them in some ways, I think. Especially in modern comics, Tony needs someone to expect the best of him and Steve does that, without fail.

And the way Steve thinks of Iron Man before he knows who is in the armor is also ( ... )

amarin_rose February 5 2008, 05:15:10 UTC

I like this minor, yet important conflict between them; Steve wanting to protect Tony from his own idiocy, and Tony thinking it's all about his heart - which it turns out it is, just in a different way. :)

crimsonquills February 7 2008, 17:59:59 UTC

I'm so glad you liked the story! I think we see a good bit of that conflict in canon, which is one of the things I like about the pairing. Tony's heart problems have been so central to his life, both civilian and Avenger, that it's interesting to think about how they sometimes distort his perceptions of situations.

Thank you for commenting! :-)

bethany_cabe February 12 2008, 18:09:12 UTC

Awesome! This was amazing: I love the incredibly sixties feel to parts of it, like the reason for Tony having to take the armour off (sixies AIM acid!) and Don Blake turning up without anyone questioning prescicely why a Norse god is best mates with a random surgeon.

Full marks, however, for the following line:

"I hope you'll forgive me," Tony said, an odd light in his eyes, "if I'm reading this wrong."

I can't quite put my finger on why, but that line is awesome. Possibly because we the readers realise instantly how Tony feels, and we already know how Cap feels - it's his POV, after all. It's incredibly suspenseful for the second you readf it, because you know the happy ending is coming next.

Great job all round, though! Well done!

crimsonquills February 24 2008, 17:23:47 UTC

Hey there! Sorry it took me so long to get around to answering this feedback. You had the bad luck of leaving it the day before my hard drive crashed and burned. Thank goodness I left the comment notification on the server! :-)

Awesome! This was amazing: I love the incredibly sixties feel to parts of it, like the reason for Tony having to take the armour off (sixies AIM acid!) and Don Blake turning up without anyone questioning prescicely why a Norse god is best mates with a random surgeon.

*grins* Thank you! I was deeply immersed in 60's Avengers comics at the time I wrote it, so while some of the classic-era touches were intentional, I think a lot of them just leaked through from what I was reading. Which worked out very well. :-)

Full marks, however, for the following line:

"I hope you'll forgive me," Tony said, an odd light in his eyes, "if I'm reading this wrong."

I can't quite put my finger on why, but that line is awesome. Possibly because we the readers realise instantly how Tony feelsI'm so glad that came through! I was ( ... )