Interlude

[seira_kuragari]

Title: Interlude
Author: Jigoku Hikari
Pairing: SasuNaru
Rated NC-17/X. Period.
Fandom: Naruto
Warnings: M/M, yaoi, lemon, oral, anal, PWP. Smut in its purest form. =^-^=
Summary: Pressed up against the wall. Both hands trapped, pinned above my head with ease.

Disclaimer: Shall never own any character used in this fic. just use 'em for smut

Comments

[gwyneda]

*takes a moment to focus her eyes* Okay, I must say, its hard to impress me with sex scenes because they're so rarely written so... powerfully, raw, emotion in its barest form, and this was- exhilarating, impressive, HOTT BEYOND ALL REASON.

GOD. ohman, you make me remember how I USED to write and this was FABULOUS.

...more now?

[seira_kuragari]

-happy squeal- Really?? You think so??? =^-^= <3 Your comment makes me happy beyond all reason. XDD

I'm so glad you love it. <3 And I SHALL be writing more SasuNaru (also in first person...!), and hopefully soon. So not yet!!!

[baylocqkd]

I really liked the style that it was written.
Reminded me of perverse poetry.
I really liked it though!
Internal monologue is always a plus.

[seira_kuragari]

yeah, never written smut in first person until this one. I'm glad it turned out so well- be expecting it again!! XD

Perverse poetry, huh? HMMM.... >.> -ponders- XD

Thanks for your comment! <3

[anime99addict]

t read, this was great for your first time writing smut.
this was definetly a nose bleeder for me, i hope u keep wriiting more. XD

[seira_kuragari]

Oh yes, shall defintely be writing more. <3

-hands over tissue box- Don't worry. I have plenty. These things happen far too often. XDDD

[desfinado]

Whew. That was sooo hot.

Really what struck me about it was that it stands out from the (probably millions by now, I've been reading fanfic for at least a decade) other PWPs I've read, because you mention so many things people don't usually mention... things that make me think of REAL LIFE sex, the parts that make it messy and sexy and painful all at once.

Panting, getting closer. He’s holding the base, licking upward, running his tongue all over the head. Lips are then on it, practically making out with it. Fuck it- I’m moaning now, quiet though. Feels. So. Amazing…

Maybe this is TMI but I could practically feel that in MY mouth, the imagery was so vivid... and that is a NICE image to have :D Again, people writing blow jobs don't usually go into that kind of intimate detail, but it's so realistic! And thus soooo sexy.

I cream the wall. Realize mid-orgasm he’s beating me off. Watching my own jizz spurting out only makes me wanna come more. (Is that wrong?) One second it won’t stop, the next it is- No! More! Gasping, wishing so

[seira_kuragari]

.... -practically glowing- ... Can I say I love you? XD

But yes. Too many people make sex out to be perfect and not messy... And as a teenager, I don't use the words "climax" or anything pretty like that in my conversations... So it just made sense to make Naruto use a language that I myself use. ><

And when I thought of the fic in the first place, I knew it had to be in first person or else it just wouldn't come out right, and wouldn't have been able to be so flexible with it.

But if you like this one... >.> Some time in the future i shall be writing another SasuNaru like it, only longer. Just a heads up. XDDD (>.> But you're not supposed to know that. haha)

And THANK YOUUUU for the amazing comment. You totally made my day entire week. It also makes me wanna go and start said upcoming SasuNaru ASAP, but I have another fic to work on before it. (><)

[desfinado]

You're welcome! I have been trying out first-person and more age-appropriate language in my own stories lately, so I will admit I am a bit partial to it right now! I can't wait for more of yours. :)

[seira_kuragari]

Yeah I completely agree that some sex scenes feel documentary-esque. Kinda takes the hotness away. XP So I wanted to write something in it's most raw form, something that shows what sex is actually like. It's not pretty and sugar-coated and is never perfect like some fics depict it. So I bring you this fic! XD

I'm happy you like it. I'm in the middle of writing the "sequel" of sorts to this, thou no promise when it'll get done. >.<'''' Thank you for commenting!!!! <3