Dead Gods

Feb 03, 2003 00:48

This is the first sequence from the screen play I have been working on for the last 3 years ( Read more... )

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grenny February 3 2003, 00:01:51 UTC
Very surreal.

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grenny February 3 2003, 00:06:14 UTC
Kind of wondering about the scene where Woo is waving his gun and screaming though... is he doing that with the detective still leveling a gun on him? Is the detective alarmed by this? Does he fire?

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semiotic7 February 3 2003, 00:14:24 UTC
Yeah, thats pretty much the idea. Woo is distracted by what is happening in the next room.

Even to the point where he ignores the gun brandishing officer.

This opening has been re-worked more times then any other part of the screenplay for exactly this reason. I've really had to struggle to make it as clear as possible. And only seems to really work for me.

Which is proably a sign I should just chuck and start over.

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sadd13man February 3 2003, 17:27:47 UTC
Can I be The FAtman?

Looking forward to the continued revilations.

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grinnifer February 3 2003, 20:43:41 UTC
very choppy. erm... that's probably not a real term. Okay then, it's very "establishing shot-ish in a comic book sorta way." Kinda like the first Spawn comics, where you try to piece together all the characters and how they know each other.

Looking forward to finding out what's next!

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semiotic7 February 3 2003, 23:15:06 UTC
"very choppy. erm... that's probably not a real term"

Yeah this seems to the general response, its to cutty and jumbled up. To hard to follow the action in your head. So far its the only idea i've come up with to convey the information I want to.

"Kinda like the first Spawn comics, where you try to piece together all the characters and how they know each other. "

I never read the Spawn comics, but I really liked the series on HBO for exactly the reason, its proably just me but I love being dropped in the middle of a story and having to piece the events out my self.

The best example of this however is Stephen Kings the Gunslinger in which you have no idea what the fuck is happeing for at least the first 80 pages and your not much closer to figuring it out by the end.

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godisalaserbeam February 5 2003, 01:52:46 UTC
"very choppy. erm... that's probably not a real term"
im only using that term

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