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Jan 06, 2008 02:43

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semivowel January 6 2008, 16:26:25 UTC
It's really awesome to have such appreciative feedback. And it's even better to get the constructive criticism. Thank you ( ... )

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seekergeek January 7 2008, 00:28:31 UTC
~ Hee. I hear you. You're a show-not-tell writer (which obviously goes SUPER! with John, who is somewhat lacking in the communications department), which has the advantage of oh, right, yielding superior stories...but it also means that boy, it can take a while, that build-up--in a structural, not necessarily a romantic sense. ~

Oh god, THAT'S why every single story I write becomes this eight bazillon word long monstrosity! *is illuminated* It's all John's fault, the communication stunted moron!

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leupagus January 6 2008, 14:22:27 UTC
Wonderful! I particularly like John's inner monologue here; it's very true to character, plus a whole lot funnier than what we get to see every week. Which I think is accurate - John strikes me as someone who finds humor in just about every situation he comes across, it's just that he can't always vocalize it.

Plus, speaking as someone who drinks Jamaican Blue Mountain, I think that John's expectation that he could trade sexual favors for it are pretty accurate.

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semivowel January 7 2008, 01:14:53 UTC
Thanks! I'm glad I got the coffee bit right. I don't drink it at all, and so I looked up fancy coffees on Wikipedia!

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leupagus January 7 2008, 01:54:03 UTC
Ah, Wikipedia, you are balm to the stresses of writers everywhere.

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anatsuno January 6 2008, 16:17:15 UTC
:D :D :D :D!
I was already smiling before I started reading, because, hey, fic from you! And I'm smiling now it's done, because of course it delivered.

I know I said once I was reading Transference for podfic - and I still am, god, it's just HARD - but of course as soon as I'd finished reading this I was already trying to record it too, because I can't help it, it's apparently a compulsion where your fics are concerned. This one is a little easier. Less parenthesis! I might even manage it soon-ish.

ANYWAY, WHAT I MEAN IS: THIS IS GRATE, YOU WIN, I LOVE. *loves, indeed, and rereads*.

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semivowel January 7 2008, 01:16:57 UTC
Thank you! Thank you!

Yeah, I'm not really sure it's advisable to try to read Transference out loud. I don't think I could do it anyway. But this one -- piece of cake.

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lazy_8s January 6 2008, 16:22:04 UTC

Oh, this was hilarious! Only John could have the Big Gay Freakout in such a fashion. I loved his final thought, 'I'm only gay for you'.

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semivowel January 7 2008, 01:17:50 UTC
Thanks! Yeah, I couldn't resist the 'gay for you' thing. It's a weakness of mine.

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sweeneybird January 6 2008, 17:04:59 UTC
"Motherfucker! He thinks angrily, rolling over and punching his pillow, he is so fucking gay now."

How much do you think we'd have to pay to have John say this on the show?

I loved this story - your characterizations were spot on, and I just love your wacky missions. Thanks for sharing!

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semivowel January 7 2008, 01:18:40 UTC
Thank you!

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