Fight Then Make Up

[sempre_amore]

Title: Fight Then Make Up
Paring:YunJae
Length:One Shot
Rating:NC-17
Warning: BATHROOM SMUT!
Summary: YunJae fight but in the end they always make up.

Comments

[pencil_earhead]

The story is really good, but there are some spelling/grammar errors you need to work on.

I can help you with that, if you'd like. I've got pretty good grammar and spelling, and I'd be glad to help. ^.^

If you'd like help, I can either help you practice, or I can beta your fics for you. Or I can do both.

Keep up the good work, and message me if you want help with anything at all. ^.^

[sempre_amore]

For my next fics if you want i will let you edit them.

Practice? How could you do that?

Thanks for reading

[pencil_earhead]

I would love to edit for you ^.^ I write fics myself, and editing will also be good practice to help me with my fics ^.^ having a good editor can also help you avoid some of the more common mistakes, too. ^.^ Well, I look forward to reading more of your fics ^.^ Keep up the good work.

Love
~Lily Smith(sickles)~

[tine_cheese]

hahaha. nice. sexy smut...but you should have been more detailed with the situation. It really didn't make sense to me how Jaejoong ignores Yunho and suddenly, when Yunho takes a shower Jaejoong wants him to be fucked....it just doesn't seem realistic. You know what I mean? other than that! Your writing style's pretty good! :]

you're 15?! ^-^ I'm 13. XDD whhhaaaaaa.....

[sempre_amore]

YOUR 13!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Holy crap ive read your fics YOUR REALLY GOOD! wow! lol...ok ill work on my fics. Thanks for reading