Comments | sengoku_basara: Pura Vida!

15freak in sengoku_basara

Pura Vida!

Jul 24, 2014 16:28

Here the amateur spams again. Another (this time a bit longer) drabble with an endlessly patient Kojuurou and a drunken Masamune. It's just knocked off crack, if anyone can laugh about it, it's a success x'D
Feedback, criticism and corrections (I'm not native speaker) very welcome!

( Often they wouldn't talk. )

character: katakura kojuurou, character: date masamune, sharing: fanfic

Comments 3

oroitadeisaso July 24 2014, 19:26:08 UTC

Yeah Masamune-sama's definitely had enough. I kind of feel sorry for Kojuurou, having such a troublesome master, but as expected, a willful Masamune-sama is still the best! XD
How old is he, indeed. Seems like he reverts back to 7th grade or something when drunk, since boys at or around that age tease those that they like :D
I can just picture the look on Masamune's face; Ciao Baby-esque ^w^
Oh, Ciao Baby is a doujinshi circle that does a lot of KojuMasa, if you didn't know that already.

A side note, but can you reduce the number of sentences that begin with "oh?" Or at least not put them so close together...

15freak July 25 2014, 19:44:00 UTC

Yes! I love Ciao Baby, too! <33 And actually, I prefer drawing to writing. Had drawn some MasaYuki-kind of doujinshi, but lately I'm more into the twin dragons :P Though, of course, everything is just at a fangirl's beginner level.
Are you writing / drawing / translating / doing graphics/anything that's related to the SenBasa fandom?

You've got me there :'D Even before posting this drabble, I already cancelled a lot of "Ohs" in it. But it seems like there are still too many (4 of which 3 are pretty close together in the latter half) left... With the last two "Ohs" I intended to make Masamune sound like he's making fun of Kojuurou. But maybe too many "Ohs" just sound dorky to native ears? So thanks a lot for pointing that out!

oroitadeisaso July 26 2014, 16:59:09 UTC

Np, word variation is important, and difficult to get right.
Yes, I do actually create fanworks for SenBasa. I can draw, but it's such a pain to get the things scanned (and cleaned, and colored, and otherwise obsess over) that I don't do that much anymore. What I do is write fanfiction, same as you.
I'm on FF.N as Villianous, if one day you find yourself bored and willing to wade through some subpar attempts of mine <3
EDIT: I should add that I don't currently write KojuMasa, as I'm more of a SasUKE fan. But I love reading all kinds of SenBasa-related fanworks!