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lol. okay, yes that was bloody brilliant. excellent interpretation of prompt! i loved it- it was funny and ingenious and i loved the part when Kakashi told her not to yell in the library. gosh.
now, i have to slowly finish writing mine. >.< sorry it's taking so long.
anyway, recs! i have an extremely long recs list here, and of the two itachi/sakura stories i like, you've read one, so the other is this by elle6778. i searched through the usual itachi/sakura community in f.f.net, but you'll have to dig through to find the gems, i guess, which is here. sorry i can't be more of a help. but there is an author named paw-bells, who comes highly recommended , though i don't particularly love her fics, you might want to give it a try and see if you like it. lol. =)
sorry i can't be more of a help. and btw, your lj layout is pretty!
Thanks for the comments! It means a lot coming from you, since I adore your kakasaku fics^^
Don't worry about taking a long time. It's totally alright XD
Thank you for the recs! You have no idea how happy I was to see the long long long list of naruto fics. You are...jfskdjfslkjfsd totally awesome!
I've read some of paw-bell's works and I do like them, although my personal impression of Itachi is a little different. Her writing is HAWT though and very descriptive. My overall impression is that her writing has matured quite a bit from her earlier works.
lol. why thank you. but really i loved the giftfic. it was laugh-out-loud funny and it was great of Sakura with the scheming plans. ingenious. anyway, you yourself are awesome <3
oops, though the long list of recs is somewhat incomplete so i'm looking to complete it soon. ack a couple more recs, since i'm rec-surfing, at here, which is a itasaku, and a fic here which is anko/iruka, which somehow works.
okay, paw-bells. i liked potato chips as well as ribbon. one of her better older fics is the the icha icha one which i thought was pretty good.
Oh I love leafygirl's stuffs. She's probably my favourite itasaku writer, although, I really haven't read too many itasaku fics.
The pairing died on me a bit after itachi died b/c I like canon!fic and it just seemed so hard to find a good portrayal of itachi which didn't turn him either into a complete fluffy, harmless bunny or complete bastard. Also, I felt itachi just had too much love for sasuke to love anyone else lol...well..at least in canon form.
I haven't read those ones by pawbells! will get on that! thx again for the recs. it's a very good list^^
This was lovely. The description of her trashing the table was epic, and then learning that it was all a feint - even better.
I do think the ending needs work though. Switching to Sakura's pov.... it's a little abrupt, and finding out that it's all part of Sakura's attempt to seduce him... it rings the wrong note, somehow. Besides which, Sakura has always been damn clear about her feelings - if she's in love, I think she'd either be utterly oblivious or would know she was. I think it might play better if you keep it in Kakashi's pov, and maybe have it end with Sakura walking off and then Kakashi realizing she's stolen his book? Or end it with the Kakashi/Sakura vibes very low-key as they go mask shopping together?
Yes, I do think the ending needs work and I think the problem w/ it is exactly the one you pointed out. Thanks for your suggestions! I think I'll go back and re-write the ending when I have time. Thanks so much though. I really appreciate your critique since it helps me to learn and improve.
You're very welcome. I know from experience that sometimes you can't quiet see what doesn't work in your writing, even if you know it's there, and I've always been pleased to get concrit myself, so... I'm glad you find it helpful.
I loved the fight! It's nice to Sakura dish out some ass-kicking in a story. Too often I see Kakashi fighting while Sakura mopes. It's nice to see her do some damage. :D
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now, i have to slowly finish writing mine. >.< sorry it's taking so long.
anyway, recs! i have an extremely long recs list here, and of the two itachi/sakura stories i like, you've read one, so the other is this by elle6778. i searched through the usual itachi/sakura community in f.f.net, but you'll have to dig through to find the gems, i guess, which is here. sorry i can't be more of a help. but there is an author named paw-bells, who comes highly recommended , though i don't particularly love her fics, you might want to give it a try and see if you like it. lol. =)
sorry i can't be more of a help. and btw, your lj layout is pretty!
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Don't worry about taking a long time. It's totally alright XD
Thank you for the recs! You have no idea how happy I was to see the long long long list of naruto fics. You are...jfskdjfslkjfsd totally awesome!
I've read some of paw-bell's works and I do like them, although my personal impression of Itachi is a little different. Her writing is HAWT though and very descriptive. My overall impression is that her writing has matured quite a bit from her earlier works.
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oops, though the long list of recs is somewhat incomplete so i'm looking to complete it soon. ack a couple more recs, since i'm rec-surfing, at here, which is a itasaku, and a fic here which is anko/iruka, which somehow works.
okay, paw-bells. i liked potato chips as well as ribbon. one of her better older fics is the the icha icha one which i thought was pretty good.
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The pairing died on me a bit after itachi died b/c I like canon!fic and it just seemed so hard to find a good portrayal of itachi which didn't turn him either into a complete fluffy, harmless bunny or complete bastard. Also, I felt itachi just had too much love for sasuke to love anyone else lol...well..at least in canon form.
I haven't read those ones by pawbells! will get on that! thx again for the recs. it's a very good list^^
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The pacing was brilliant, and the bit at the end had me smiling.
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I do think the ending needs work though. Switching to Sakura's pov.... it's a little abrupt, and finding out that it's all part of Sakura's attempt to seduce him... it rings the wrong note, somehow. Besides which, Sakura has always been damn clear about her feelings - if she's in love, I think she'd either be utterly oblivious or would know she was. I think it might play better if you keep it in Kakashi's pov, and maybe have it end with Sakura walking off and then Kakashi realizing she's stolen his book? Or end it with the Kakashi/Sakura vibes very low-key as they go mask shopping together?
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Yes, I do think the ending needs work and I think the problem w/ it is exactly the one you pointed out. Thanks for your suggestions! I think I'll go back and re-write the ending when I have time. Thanks so much though. I really appreciate your critique since it helps me to learn and improve.
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