sometimes I think I'm bigger than the sound

[serafina_zane]

And this would be the promised merry_fates contest post. Written for this prompt:

Comments

[london_setterby]

Hey, I followed your link from merry_fates. Hope that's ok! :) Just wanted to say I like your story. Especially this line: “You spend a lot of time on the edge of parties,” he corrected. “I’m just here to make sure you don’t fall into the lake.”

[serafina_zane]

It's completely okay! Thank you!

[simonhay_healer]

I really like this one. I can feel the mc without her being described. I'm looking through her eyes. Somethings going to happen. A wistful lost something. This is the best story I've read of yours so far. I must try and write a story with dialogue. Cheers, Simon.

[serafina_zane]

Thanks! I was pretty proud when I finished this story and realized I'd managed to avoid describing the main character, I've been trying to move away from lists of features descriptions.

[tessagratton]

I love this whole thing. It's excellent. Not a thing I'd change.

This line, esp:

He wasn’t a friend of a friend anymore. He was my best friend’s boyfriend’s best friend, which sounded even more tangential but wasn’t, actually. We were partners in exclusion.

Really, really well done.

[serafina_zane]

Thanks so much! I love vague connections like that. And am a master of the art of third-wheeling.

[tessagratton]

Go check out the winners announcement!!!!!

[serafina_zane]

:D

[serafina_zane]

:D Thank you! Seriously, I was grinning when I read this comment. I really like this one, and I've been liking the stuff I finish a lot better lately.

[annemariewrites]

This could be a really cool episode of something. "HEROES: the teenage years". I really like the atmospheric quality. Congrats on the win. 'twas well deserved. :D

[serafina_zane]

Thank you!