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[set_fire_to_it]

this is the first chapter to my story. theres a lot of punctuation mistakes because i dont have microsoft word so if things like that bother your then you might not want to read it. if you have an opinion on the story at all id like to hear it. i hope you enjoy it to an extent

Comments

[stellathediver_]

Its good and all but its very fiction considering the two peoples reactions when he falls through the floor. It seems as if she see's it every day and its not a big thing.

[allsfulloflove]

that's the point! ...
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..wait, is it?

YES!

[stellathediver_]

Fiction was the wrong word to use. More like unrealistic. I don't know to me everything is moving to fast but its still a good story/way of meeting a new character. Sorry if my opinion is stupid to any of jew kneegrows.

[allsfulloflove]

This one is my favorite Campbell story ever. I love it. You have to keep writing.

[bexstillxchild]

you already know what i think, but...amazing<33333 plaque. brilliant.

ex oh ex oh

[yodarules]

You know what I think too! But I'll just remind you again. Its awesome. The only thing it lacks is more! write write write! The other day I was thinking about it so it must have been some weird psychological connection we have for you to write more/revise. Ugh I love you.

[swimintherain]

You are amazing. You should write novels. You should definately write more. and when you are done I would like to read the whole thing cause I am out of books.