Short story

[setanta_wing]

This is the opening of a first draft. It's my first attempt at writing a cogent piece in many years and, yes, I know I have problems with dialogue, always have

Carl O'Neill was a reporter. Not much of a reporter, a few page 17s on the state of the European Union during it's rise to power in the early twenty first century, he did have his one first

Comments

[saoili]

It's an interesting beginning and I do want to know where it's going. I think the jolt into the first person is too sudden, and while it's explained later on, I'm not sure it works that way. Maybe starting That's where the story started. on a new line with new inverted commas would work?