This is your first fic? Yes, please, more! This is gorgeous, just amazing. Because, yeah.
I love the slide into the killer last line. You had me convinced it was Elizabeth right up until then. I read it again looking for the reveal and the subtle hints really are there.
ETA: the person [formally] known as Laura Cadman steadily met the gaze of the blue eyes which had once belonged to Meredith Rodney McKay. I think [formally] should be formerly?
I'm glad that it was a surprise but that the hints were there on the re-read.
I wondered if "pounding through the corridors of Atlantis" would give it away straight off. I re-wrote that three times because Laura goes running before bed to unwind so it is the perfect time for thinking things through but I didn't want to give it away!
Most of my other plot bunnies are pretty mean to him as well! I'd been reluctant to publish anything because I couldn't find anyone to beta and was a bit worried. But I was inspired by the challenge and decided to bite the bullet so to speak.
I'm dead chuffed that several people who've made positive comments are people whose stuff I love so *whew*!
Now this last weekend is over I've gained some confidence and I'm going to tweak and publish some more stories.
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I love the slide into the killer last line. You had me convinced it was Elizabeth right up until then. I read it again looking for the reveal and the subtle hints really are there.
ETA: the person [formally] known as Laura Cadman steadily met the gaze of the blue eyes which had once belonged to Meredith Rodney McKay. I think [formally] should be formerly?
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I'm glad that it was a surprise but that the hints were there on the re-read.
I wondered if "pounding through the corridors of Atlantis" would give it away straight off. I re-wrote that three times because Laura goes running before bed to unwind so it is the perfect time for thinking things through but I didn't want to give it away!
Happy you liked!
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And I really like him as well! *shrugs* Ah well!
Most of my other plot bunnies are pretty mean to him as well! I'd been reluctant to publish anything because I couldn't find anyone to beta and was a bit worried. But I was inspired by the challenge and decided to bite the bullet so to speak.
I'm dead chuffed that several people who've made positive comments are people whose stuff I love so *whew*!
Now this last weekend is over I've gained some confidence and I'm going to tweak and publish some more stories.
So thank you very much for your kind words!
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*grins like idiot, tries to recover dignity...fails*
You're the second person to suggest expansion! I've had a few ideas so you never know. ;-)
The encouragement is unbelievably appreciated!
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