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Brigit's Flame, January Week 2 - Destiny

Jan 17, 2010 02:10

“Needless to say, it just goes to prove, unlike the government, not everyone can get away with robbing the nobility,” Phillip concluded the story of his triumph over the thieves’ guild, chuckling.

Truly it had been a triumph, but in a slightly different way than he was telling it. He had been a member of the guild for years, ‘coerced’ into it after ( Read more... )

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moonlitxmelody January 17 2010, 22:31:22 UTC

Ho.Ley.God! Hon, this is amazing! It's very interesting to see the noble side from the thief's eyes. It almost makes me feel the contempt he feels for the poor girl, though it also makes me mad. Poor thing. If she looks as he describes, it is no wonder she seeks romance in books since men will not pay court to her. I can't wait to see what happens though! I hope he gets his own! Wouldn't it be quite the kick back if he actually ends up falling for her? XD Though with the way she's described, he doesn't seem to like her much. She IS rather dreamy. But the substance to the characters is just wonderful!

shadowdream January 17 2010, 23:57:54 UTC

Thanks! :) I really really appreciate the kind words.

hehe. There are plans for them. I'm not sure whether it will ever make it up here, but who knows!

Phillip isn't a bad sort, and truly, he doesn't have contempt for her. And he IS and will continue to be, kind to her. (Just think of the center of attention she is going to be in her circle of friends now!) Right now, she is the means to an end. He'll give her what she wants (a relationship and romance) and he gets what he wants (access to daddy's books).

Not so much planning on Phillip falling for her, but getting a certain fondness and friendship with her. She'll benefit from it greatly in the end. ;)

The hubby and I have a whole novel in our heads based around this character and another... There is so much I couldn't put in since it is just a short story! I have a feeling he will continue to show up, and the story will become clearer as we go! :)

moonlitxmelody January 18 2010, 02:49:12 UTC

That's amazing! Keep going for it, hon!

rephen January 19 2010, 07:27:49 UTC

He plays them like a concert master! Phillip! What a man! Very nicely written, you. His character deepened with this piece and it certainly shows off his unscrupulous sides very well. Melenaie is a pretty name. I like how smooth Phillip was when he was with her. What a player! I really enjoyed reading that. Hope to see more from you :D

shadowdream January 19 2010, 20:10:06 UTC

Thank you much, on all counts! :) There will be more to come. Phillip is getting his own novel though, so mebbe no more Phillip after this story is through. There are always other characters. ;)

sue_bridehead January 19 2010, 20:03:21 UTC

Very interesting! I enjoyed your writing style and the descriptions. I can see this becoming a full novel. If you continue it, watch that Philip doesn't have too much luck in his conquests (such as with Melenaie), or he could come across as a little too perfect. Maybe she could reject him, or perhaps a secret from his days as a professor could come back to haunt him or one of his 'partners in crime' he thinks is dead is actually alive. Just a few suggestions. :D

Good luck with this! I think it has a lot of promise.

shadowdream January 19 2010, 20:14:45 UTC

Thank you so much! :) Yes! It is going to become a novel, I think. Once I start writing this, I just can't stop! This was SUPPOSED to be a short story that would be done in 1500 words for week 1. I have at least two more to go on just this little bit.

Oh, and don't worry. Phillip has his faults, and his weaknesses. *grins* It's just a little hard to show them off in one little short story. The last two of your suggestions, well, they're pretty close to the mark. ;)

Thank you very much! Give it a few years and maybe you'll see it on a bookshelf somewhere!

sue_bridehead January 19 2010, 20:18:22 UTC

Good, I hope so!

vyvyan_wilde January 20 2010, 02:54:09 UTC

Woah. I like this story even more than the previous one :3
What a cool character Phillip is! I think he's got just the right amount of self-assurance and slyness to make him facinating, but not unlikeable.
And the descriptions of the party and the guests were perfect; I felt like I was really there!
I cannot wait to learn more about Phillip's next conquest. Awesome work!

shadowdream January 20 2010, 07:20:50 UTC

Thank you very much for the compliments! :) That is exactly what I'm aiming for with Phillip. He's an anti-hero, not a villain. I'm glad to see it's showing through! :)

Thanks so much!