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haiku- bassist's lament
Sep 12, 2009 16:02
band saw, splattered blood
nerves in finger knit slowly
red bass collects dust
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sameasiteverwas
September 14 2009, 13:25:58 UTC
i'd take the comma out of the first line to create ambiguity as to whether it was an on-stage accident
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shaesinister
September 14 2009, 17:48:23 UTC
ha, cute. didn't think of that.
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