haiku- bassist's lament

Sep 12, 2009 16:02

band saw, splattered blood
nerves in finger knit slowly
red bass collects dust

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sameasiteverwas September 14 2009, 13:25:58 UTC
i'd take the comma out of the first line to create ambiguity as to whether it was an on-stage accident

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shaesinister September 14 2009, 17:48:23 UTC
ha, cute. didn't think of that.

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