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Fic: Tomorrow

Nov 15, 2011 14:55

Title: Tomorrow
Username: duskblue
Art: Sunshine by the_limousine
Word Count: 2084
Rating: PG
Contains: I was told this is “pre-slash.” LOL?
Summary: Remus and Sirius discuss losing James to Lily among other things. :)
Notes/comments: I had a little trouble getting this out as I wanted. It didn't quite go where I wanted it to go, and I didn't quite get the picture in ( Read more... )

the_limousine, fic: tomorrow, artist, author: duskblue

Comments 15

remuslives23 November 15 2011, 06:07:21 UTC

LOVE! <3 I love this stage of their relationship where they're feeling around to see how the other feels and you wrote it brilliantly! It was perfectly awkward and sweet and funny. And I love the hopeful tentativeness of the ending. Beautifully done!

duskblue November 15 2011, 08:20:59 UTC

Thank you! <3 I love writing/drawing/reading awkwardness :D

brighty18 November 15 2011, 17:10:07 UTC

This was sweet and funny and just what I needed to start my morning. I loved this piece of art from the very start - and not just because of the bright, fabulous, sunshiney yellow. There was a real story there already: Sirius’ almost confessional closed eyes and Remus’ sweet hesitancy. And you captured that story well. I also loved how you used that background color, not as sunshine, but as party lights. That was very clever.

Sirius’ jealousy here was darling. One doesn’t often see him as stumbling and hesitant over anything, but this is the sort of thing that would really make him so. More than anything on earth, Sirius loves his friends . Even in canon that is quite evident. The wedding - and especially in light of Remus getting hit on by a guy named Kevin Meath - would bring that all to light for him.

There whole exchange had a delightful, boyish quality that felt very right for the time period. Sirius saying this: “Remus,” Sirius said, his voice sounding thicker. “You don't really like your little flat in that crummy part ( ... )

duskblue November 17 2011, 08:28:44 UTC

Thank you for your wonderfully detailed and delightful review! <3 It gave me a big smile!! <3 And also, thank you so much for the rec!

thesiriusmoon November 15 2011, 17:25:52 UTC

This is adorable!

I've been on a real angst kick lately, but this just brightened my day right up!

duskblue November 17 2011, 08:28:55 UTC

Thank you so much! <3

ithinktsdashing November 17 2011, 16:14:25 UTC

Beautiful, sweeet and... aw <3 I love the awkwardness, and Sirius being jealous! Haha, I love when he is jealous, and you wrote it really well.

duskblue November 18 2011, 12:24:44 UTC

Thank you very much <3!

eprime November 19 2011, 03:40:14 UTC

This was funny and sweet. I really liked the bit with Kevin and how Remus and Sirius both got it, but it was so understated and really well done. And poor Remus with the cousins, haha. I can feel his slight haze of inebriation throughout this. Great job!

duskblue November 19 2011, 06:23:39 UTC

Thank you! <3!