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Fic: Washed on the Shore of a Second Chance by Mindabbles

Nov 22, 2011 11:57

Title: Washed on the Shore of a Second Chance
Username: mindabbles
Art: " Flirt" by mypretty_art
Word Count: 4,800
Rating: light R
Contains: *AU in which Sirius never makes it to Azkaban. Instead, he ends up in a different reality - where Remus never went to Hogwarts, so there wasn't someone on whom Peter could throw suspicion.*
Summary: Sometimes Remus catches him ( Read more... )

artist: mypretty_art, fic: washed on the shore of a 2nd chance, fic, author: mindabbles

Comments 33

escribo November 22 2011, 18:08:26 UTC

This is really wonderful. I love your characterizations, particularly Remus who is alternatively confident and hesitant. I love the flirting, I love the coming together. Perfect.

mindabbles December 8 2011, 06:31:41 UTC

Thank you so much! I'm really happy you liked the characterizations. I did rework them (with much beta help) a few times, so I'm really glad to hear that. Thank you so much. What wonderful things to hear. :)

epithalamium November 23 2011, 02:13:59 UTC

OMG, this was just so perfect! I agree with nishiara_hitomi, there's something about this that's melancholy, even as you make me smile and melt with their ridiculously hot flirtation and their light banter. It's like Sirius had been thrown a fast ball, and he's trying to wing it as best as he can. It's good, because the people he loves are still there to be with him, at the same time, he knows just how bad things could get, and I think that thought changed him somewhat: I get the feeling that he'd cherish all the little things more now that he ever did, because this IS his second chance, and my heart breaks because I know he's been through a lot and I'm so happy he can have this life.

Also, Sirius looking at Remus fondly, and Remus saying, 'I remind you of someone' just makes me smile and cry a little bit. Oh, this! <3 <3

mindabbles December 8 2011, 07:11:11 UTC

Thank you so much!! I agree that it's melancholy. I guess there's no getting around that because of what is implied that Sirius has lost. The first version was quite sad and I got great feedback from my betas and artist about things to think about adding. I love your description of it by the way. That really made me smile. I love that you saw it as Sirius being thrown a fast ball and trying to make the best of it. I was going for that exactly. And yes to him cherishing things more because it's his second chance. Awww, THANK YOU SO MUCH for this wonderful feedback.

torino10154 November 24 2011, 02:18:47 UTC

This is heartbreaking and bittersweet in some ways. Would that Sirius could have had a second chance with Remus for real, with James and Lily there too. But seeing Remus fall in love with him for the first time, as someone he doesn't know is incredibly sweet. Lovely fic, Min.

mindabbles May 12 2012, 07:24:44 UTC

omg, did I really never reply to this???????? omg, sorry!!! ♥

Thank you!!! I love this comment, because you mention everything I was hoping to do in this fic--the bittersweet, falling in love for the first time, but with a bit of heartbreak. Thank you so much!!

protegonox November 26 2011, 20:46:05 UTC

Awesome story! I loved the switching POVs, as it gave us a glimpse in the minds of both of them. I also liked how you included Mr Flourish in there, he was such a lovely character.

Sirius is wonderful in here, too. I'd love to read more from his POV, to see if he ever thinks about the Remus from his own universe, or even what happened to Sirius in that universe (if you know what I mean - like what happened to the Sirius from the world where James is alive?).

I love the subtlety of Sirius's reactions to this new Remus and how it's in the little things that I know as a reader that he's remembering the Remus from his past.

Overall, AMAZING!

mindabbles May 20 2012, 18:02:08 UTC

I am SO sorry it took me so long to respond to this. That has nothing to do with what the comment means to me AT all, and everything to do with life. Anyway...

THANK YOU! I am so glad you liked the switching POVs. Hee, it was fun to include Mr. Flourish. I like to give them some supportive older people. It would be fun to rewrite this, or a prequel or sequel from Sirius' POV. I imagine he does think about the Remus from his universe. Thank you!!!

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mindabbles May 20 2012, 18:09:42 UTC

God, I am SO sorry it took me so long to reply. Life's been a bit...and several things have slipped. So...

THANK YOU SO MUCH!! I am really happy you enjoying it. I am thrilled the set up worked for you--I've written alternate dimension/time fic a couple of times and am always concerned inserting something too confusing. I tried to keep this one fairly simple. Thank you. Hee, more? It would be fun to play with them more here. That you wanted more is the best thing ever. Thank you!