Comments | shanaynanayner: here we go...

shanaynanayner

here we go...

Sep 27, 2006 18:54

Okay, here's one of my college essays. I'm not too confident, and its 26 words too many, but I'd love to hear some feedback.

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unsold_capacity September 27 2006, 23:12:26 UTC

I don't have any general critique because holistically it is excellent (good organization, flow, cohesion of ideas, accomplishing task, revealing your personality), but I would love to print out/edit/throw it at you because there are some small things. BUT I never see you...HOW SHOULD I DO THIS?! Isn't your English class Coker 3rd or 5th? Or am I just insane? LET ME KNOW, SHANA.

shanaynanayner September 27 2006, 23:21:34 UTC

I have Coker 5th period. or, if you'd like, we could do an awkward you-edit-it-then-give-it-to-Chris-or-Jack-so-that-they0can-give-it-to-me-during-orchestra handoff thing.

Thanks so much, and I love edits.

litlefallofrain September 27 2006, 23:41:36 UTC

I likes it! Love the idea, it's quite representative of you. And totally true to your personality. If you want, I can look over it a bit closer and find a way to word crunch a bit (I had to do it last year for my essays) and send it along?

But seriously. Totally Shana.

shanaynanayner September 28 2006, 00:33:55 UTC

Thanks! Actually, any help w/word crunching would be great!

litlefallofrain September 28 2006, 00:37:47 UTC

Totally! I don't know what time I'll get to it, can I leave it for ya to pick up in the morning or do you need it earlier?

shanaynanayner September 28 2006, 00:40:58 UTC

No, later will be alright.