No Stopping Us

[shastatwist]

Here's the first actual chapter of my story, I don't think it's very good, but some constructive criticism would be great, thank you. <3

Chapter 1

BrodyThe first day of school, September 9, 2004. A new life, a new school, a new beginning, a new city, a new state, and time to create a new me. I don’t want to be the same kid I was in eighth

Comments

[endlesscalamity]

It was good ^^ I liked your dialouge, and you're developing the characters very nicely =D

[shastatwist]

I don't like that fact that until after I wrote the chapter, I didn't think that... uhm... How did he think he could get through the school day without anyone noticing the cut? Oh, well...

[shastatwist]

the fact*

[trublumoon]

you're good. but i didnt know brody was a guy.

[shastatwist]

You had to have read the prologue (previous entry.)