Cardboard Boxes and Paper Dreams

Nov 17, 2004 03:20

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aworlduntothem November 18 2004, 17:06:33 UTC
Still can't believe you got kicked out of the whole "poetry_community" thing. :(

Not sure if you've read it, but this kinda reminds me of Philip Larkin's "Love Songs in Age"...cept you use visual imagery whereas his is all about the audial.

Not gonna perform my standard dissection whatwith it all being a fairly long poem so will just focus on that last line and how the words 'refusing to be' make it ambigous. In one sense, it suggests that the memory of love is more complex than one would think and that to be a memory would demote it from the pedestal it deserves. In the other sense, it suggests a kind of naive obsession on the part of people who can't let go of memories. The whole poem is about love as a memory, and yet the obsession forces the mindset into thinking that past-love isn't a memory but is in the present and future.

Anyway, that's what I see :) Keep 'em coming, your poems are totally refreshing inasmuch that they make me think about things I wouldn't ordinarily. They make me smile. Sweet as.

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she__sings November 18 2004, 18:40:08 UTC
I knew my lone commenter would pull through for me on this one :)

Yeah, I'm happy with how this one turned out...

and you "got" it dead-on. Awesome :)

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