Its Human Position, Paul + Cynthia (John/Paul), PG

[she_had_to_go]

Title: Its Human Position
Pairing: Paul + Cynthia (John/Paul)
Rating: PG
Word Count: 493
Notes: For cellarfulofboys prompt #6: non-Beatle POV. This has been sitting on my hard drive for well over a year, mostly because it's got no context and without that it feels OOC for me. But as it mostly fits the prompt, it a qualifying length, and will never see the light

Comments

[she_had_to_go]

Oh, thank you! I'm glad it still works. I always hung on to it with the hope of expanding it into a full fic, but whenever I tried, it never went anywhere.

Thanks for reading!

[byttebob]

Yeah I like how it's not in a set situation, too.

[pauls_left_hand]

It works really really well as a short fic. I'm glad you decided to dust it off. Love the whole premise.

[she_had_to_go]

Thank you! Maybe that's why it would never go anywhere. It was already done!

I'm glad you liked it!

[749_penny_lane]

It seems very realistically female for Cynthia to push for Paul to admit to something she's not really ready to cope with. And very realistic for Paul to know he loves John and wants him but to be unclear on the concept of what to do with that.

I guess I'm wondering is this a drabble about Cynthia's relationship with Paul? Or about Paul's relationship with John? Or about Cynthia's relationship with John? If you want to do something further with this story idea, then sharpening the point of view and defining this aspect more clearly would probably help. I gather from reading her book about John that Cynthia is a rather dim person, so the idea that she's in a bit of a muddle about what she wants from Paul and why she's having the conversation seems realistic. But does she see him as a friend? or a rival? or both? And more of the emotion that would attach to any or all of those possibilities would be good.

[minds_opaque]

It's kind of nice to see a Cynthia with the brains to notice what's going on. Makes her more sympathetic, somehow.

I would have to agree with 749_penny_lane and ask how Cynthia feels about Paul. It seems like she herself doesn't know, really. But making that clearer will sharpen this fic and focus anything longer you write. And what's Paul's attitude towards Cynthia? I liked that you showed his surprise. I think he'd be especially surprised in a scene like this because he counts on her being oblivious.

[spoonzees]

WOW. I can't say anything but that.