Espionage | Prologue

[shegeki]

Title: Espionage
Rating: PG-15[for violence and swearing]
Pairing: Kyuhyun/Donghae
Summary: Donghae is suddenly forced to live in hiding with only one other person to trust. One other person he doesn't know.
Notes: 507 words. It only a prologue, so it's sort of short. It doesn't necessarily make sense right now. It's not supposed to anyway.

Comments

[tees2mai]

O.o wat hppdn!? theres mroe right!

[shegeki]

Of course there's more. It would be a very weird story if it wasn't

Thank you for the comment. :D

[anonymous]

Re: OHOHOHO

[shegeki]

Stop calling me that. My name is obviously not cashew, it's shegeki. :D

Link me ot your first fic. I demand to know KC[revenge is mine]. If I turn you into a fan I'll admit I'll have written something good.

I'll update...soon.

If you remember any errors then point them out will you?

...(sing that again and I'll run down all the staircases really quickly and tell everyone your middle name~)

[anonymous]

Re: OHOHOHO

[shegeki]

I'm screening your comments. They are appropriate for other people.

And I know it'll annoy you to no end and you'll bug me about it when I meet you.

Haha. My evil pwns all. :D

[darleenk]

I saw your comment on the meme, do you want me to con-crit you, bb? Not saying I'm perfect, there's just a few grammar and syntax issues I could point out for you. ♥

[shegeki]

Go ahead. Not exactly the sensitive type. (btw you are totally perfect. *.*)

Haha. I didn't know you were at the meme! I should have figured. You're always at those things. :D

Oh and before I forget, how was Greenday?

[darleenk]

I'm not perfect dajksld. Far from it. AND LOL, I HAVE TO KEEP UP WITH THE HATERS -dies- I totally need to open myself for anonymous concrit at some point.

GREEN DAY WAS FREAKING EPIC! \o/ BILLY JOE!

And now down to concrit:

He fought to mask his surprise, trying hard to keep a straight face.

They both mean basically the same thing, to make your writing cleaner, you could keep it to just the one clause.

He clicked the briefcase shut and stood up. He gave one last acknowledging glance towards the old man, sitting across from him, before taking his leave.

I'd change it to 'glance of acknowledgement' just because I like the phrasing better, but I'm nitpicking here. Remove the comma so it's 'towards the old man sitting across from him, before'.

He heard what the employees his office said about him.

Just pop an 'in' after 'employees'.

He himself agreed.

Maybe change that to 'Donghae agreed' or 'Donghae had to agree'? Makes the phrasing cleaner.

he had an image he needed to keep.

Perhaps 'image to uphold'?

"Oh it's only you."

[shegeki]

I'm glad you like green day. Wish I could have gone. D:

Changed! I swear I should stop saying my first language is English. Cos' it obviously not a language I communicate well in. XD. Some of those mistakes were plain retarded. DDD: Oh well.

Thanks for correcting them though. ♥ ♥ ♥ <---hearts for you.

Haha. Did you know that your comment is actually long than my fic itself.*useless fact is useless*

Totally perfect!!! I wish i could write like you. But then I'd be like you. I'm not sure I can cope with the insanity yet. :P

THANK YOU!!!

[bffimagine]

HAHAHA the ending was pretty priceless. Cursing!Donghae is just such a hilarious image in my mind.

Thanks for sharing! :)